xiaohai_23 personally i find this a great synopsis. Just like veronica said change some of your sentences, other then the married one that was great. For example, instead of
Who is that mysterious man that is now her husband, and why does he seem to know so much about her?
you could do something like.
She is now married to a mysterious man who knows things she never told anyone.
though i also agree with veronica that one thing your missing is a strong binder between your last two sentences. if this duke character is important a hook towards his character would be important since many look for relatable characters and they might connect with this character or at least believe they will.
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