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@StackThatCoin, for your walls, I've two colors. Yellow and black man. Yellow and black. XD But that virtual house painter from Susre was is a great idea. As for quiet place, I think carpet absorbs sound better than wooden tiles, plus works slightly better at insulating the house from the freezing foundation.

It was great reading a life story from you! It's so realistic and plausible that I feel like "that person that STC was talking about? Yeah, that could be me."

And do you think your secret honeymoon trip will remain a secret from her? Maybe she might be secretly following you, reading whatever you translated. Who knows how a woman thinks. *shrugs*

Chapter 1:
"Countless mythical stories and legends were like a thick layer of cloud, putting up a mysterious veil in front of the Green City."
The countless. in front of Green City.

"The ninth day of the third lunar month, the day was suitable for worship."
was a day suitable for worship. without the comma.

"groups of Daoists clad in green cloth were seen holding three incense sticks in their hand, traveling quickly through the trail without making any sound."
in their hands. on the trail

"riding on the wind and traveling across a distance of nearly one hundred meters."
riding the wind sounds better. imo

"At the forefront of these Daoists, right at the foot of the rock wall, stood another group of Daoists. They were clad in a purple Daoist robe with a golden edge, and a symbol of 'Eight Diagrams' [1] was embroidered on both their chest and back with silver lines."
In front of sounds better than at the forefront of. They were clad in purple Daoist robes with golden edges, and a symbol of 'Eight Diagrams' [1] was embroidered on their chests and backs. You can't use "They" and then go on using singular.

"There were even patterns of clouds, plants, and flowers stitched near the edge of their sleeves. Their outfit had given them a touch of magnificent."
edges. plural. outfit should also be plural. a touch of magnificence. not magnificent.

"This group of noble Daoists was now wielding a 'Hossu' [2] with their hand, standing expressionlessly with their back straight."
These noble Daoists were now all wielding a Hossu in their hands, ... with their backs straight. The sentence above makes no sense like that.

"Those Daoists clad in purple robes knelt and bowed together, murmuring a prayer under their breath.A white flare flicked on the rock wall. The scroll was made using purple jade as its roller and weaved with gold threads that wafted out from it."
murmuring a prayer under their breaths. flickered on the rock wall?

"The sword, pearl, and small cauldron had a small size,"
Sounds horrible. Might wanna use "were small". Also, take away the small before the cauldron. I don't need to know about a small cauldron being small.

"In front of everyone, the old Daoist who received the scroll just now opened up the cap of one of the bottle
and it seemed like their surrounding was brightened up as well."
one of the bottles. their surroundings were brightened up. again plural.

"The old purple robe Daoist hurriedly sealed back the cap of the bottle tightly."
purple robed Daoist. also the last part sounds clunky.

"It was imaginable that the pill contained in the bottle must be a precious treasure. Few old purple robe Daoists clustered together, murmuring and discussing for some time, then put the sword, pearl, cauldron, talismans, and medicine bottles away."
One could guess that the pill contained in the bottle had to be a precious treasure. A few old purple robed Daoists were clustered together.

"As for the second half of the content, it simply made these old Daoists' face turn pale, trembling and bewildered, as they burst out in cries. Approximately fifteen minutes later, countless Daoist swarmed out from the Green City Mountain."
made their faces turn pale leaving them trembling and bewildered as they burst out in tears. countless Daoists.

note: More than half of the mistakes in the chapter are related to singular/plural grammar. Should be easy to fix. You should try to work on that. @StackThatCoin