https://www.webnovel.com/book/11779769906517505/Conjoined-Adventures
Hi guys, can you review my work? I'm always rereading the first 2 chapters and tried to rewrite it again and again. I appreciate greatly your help. Thank you.
Can someone review my first web novel?
The main problems that I noticed are: 1)You keep on changing tens of narration once you use Present, once you use past.
2)You write "his" in where it should be "he is"
3)Once you refer to the bull as "it" once as "he"
Btw. you can check my novel if you want https://www.webnovel.com/book/11646366805464805
Change the cover for God sake, and please put the title on the bottom side coz if you put a long title at the upper side the cover, the 'original' text will block some of the title characters.
second, if you use some medical terms, you should also put additional information about that term with the common language. Not everyone willing to open google to search what it's mean
Res_Publica thank you, thank you!! I don't have proofreaders, so that is why I created this forum and also I'm still practicing my English communication skill.. XD
thank you again for pointing out my mistakes.
Res_Publica I'm gonna take your book as one of my references. Thank you ;)
It's good that you can take the critisms and expand your horizon, I might not check out your novel since I'm a picky person when it comes to what I read, but I think you'll improve a lot if you polish your skills. :)
1) You can change chapters already posted so you can make the 1st chapter more readable
2) the last line of the second chapter "He really fly with a flying colors" isn't grammatically correct, It's unclear what you're trying to say.
3) I just skimmed over it, so i hope I was able to help, however its not clear if the twins shared the body or had separate bodies to me, but i do get the feeling it's shared.
Will do that.
Proofread? MS Word proofreads your work once you type it. Another, enter the text into another word processor or another app and the App can proofread it for you. There's many out there. Finally reread the entire text line by line before entering the text into the WebNovel platform. Hard work? Yes. Like any endeavor anyway.
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Those don't work sometimes tho. If the meaning is off but the grammar is technically correct, those programs won't fix it. A pro proofreader will at least point it out to the author. So they are ofc better than nothing but they can't substitute a human proofreader.
3 years later
Can anyone proofread my work please