Prehistoric_Wolf Reincarnation series don't have op protagonist. They are op for their age but has an anagonist like a thousand times older than them.
Have you ever seen these guys face people who are the same layer as them? No! The authors wants a bit of spice...
The op factor of MC is dependent on the antagonist.
thelightishere what about one(s) that don't have an antagonist? or at least don't yet?
ok so lowkey marketing my own story
but my MC is reincarnated-- though she doesn't have any OP skills. really because I find it annoying where characters constantly have things to aid them in the new world (it's such an overused trope) that I wanted to write something out of the norm. basically, my MC was an art major in her past life, and all she knows to do is to draw, which clearly isn't the most useful. however the skill turns out to be somewhat useful when future events come and she needs to apply her art skills, but in general, it's a story about discovering new skills and developing her artistic talent, which will be a slower process than MCs that start off the story with some sort of cheat like a system or guardian spirit.
overall though, I like reincarnation fics just because they're sort of satisfying haha
DeJeL I'm trying to write here bro, for 3 months I'm trying to come up a Story of my own!
yaoyueyi whats the title bro?
thelightishere what i meant is the place where you were reincarnated is your heaven. A world just created just for the MC's where they kill or massacre their way up to the top.
yaoyueyi I feel the same (Though my novel has an OP transmigrated MC, however my novel isn't about power, it's about having fun, and I try to keep things lighthearted. Long story... tag me if interested its still pretty short.)
Prehistoric_Wolf It's not very clear what you're asking for to me, please clarify.
EldridSmith hmu
also don't worry, I love shorter stories mostly because I don't have time to read 3108419204 chapters lol
yaoyueyi So you'd be up to read it?
DeJeL they usually switch antagonists. LoHP has way too minor antagonists. They nearly never pose a threat to Zhang Xuan.
Series that did have an antagonist were DMWG, for the first 1.2k chaps, he faced one guy over and over, like three times.
Antagonists always get power jumps for no apparent reason. The MC also lets them to grow from an ant status to a powerhouse.
I dislike weak to strong series because of that.
Prehistoric_Wolf if they did, then that would be interesting. Sadly, the planning takes more time than the action... Such unbadass characters.
This is why I prefer Womanizing True Immortal, he never reincarnates or loses his cultivatation, he has cultivation, power, brain and motive, his motive being picking up girls.
He never plans and massacre is the only thing that ends up happening to the antagonists.
EldridSmith yea?
EldridSmith ok, so i tried reading the first 10 or so chapters, but could not get through it, sorry!
constructive criticism (don't read this if you're not looking for any?)
1) Instead of having transitions such as **First period class* and put something like "At his first period, blablabla" instead. This gives smoother writing, and seeing these scene skips really doesn't make me enjoy a book imo.
2) Instead of writing "Author note: It's a school orientation, its boring as hell, I'm not describing it." (which takes the reader out of the flow of the story), you could actually have someone like Eldrid bring it into his perspective. This could go like, "Eldrid zoned out at the school orientation. It was boring as hell. He could barely focus blabla. When he snapped back to reality, he realized it was already over and rushed to head over to his first period class."
3) Basic grammar issues such as spelling 'Google' as 'Googel'. This could be fixed by using something like Google Docs to type your rough drafts in so that spellcheck would fix it for you.
4) In the first chapter, instead of saying "No biggie." ??? said. I would've said "No biggie," replied the stranger. "???" is really unprofessional?
5) I like how they don't transmigrate by dying-- that's a first for me actually!
6) However, they appear to be a little TOO accepting of the fact that they've transmigrated which is a bit unrealistic and suspicious.
7) Oh, and if someone was bitten by a rabid dog, then it is likely that they would've been injected with a bunch of rabies vaccine to prevent the disease from spreading. Basic research can help further solidify your story!
8) I like the names though. Generally, I find a lot of names in stories that I don't like because they're so generically Western, but Eldrid and Adrian are good names! :joy:
9) Malthael is cool.
10) Systems are not my favorite, but it's nice to see that he doesn't have full grasp on the system when he first gets it! And it's nice that it came as a wish and not as just something that he got to keep because he is a ultra special transmigrator. It's very refreshing.
Overall, I found that the first few chapters had a lot more mistakes then the later ones on. Most likely because you learned as you were writing of how to improve, but that's a big issue because readers can drop your story because the grammar and little mistakes in the first chapter, and that's not a good thing!
Personally, the main reason why I dropped it was because I'm not the biggest fan of system novels and I came on this site to read Chinese/historical fics, sooo... but it was a good story overall! I see lots of potential in the world building! Do not be discouraged by my advice please, I'm only trying to be honest. <3
EldridSmith link pliss. good story??
yaoyueyi
1) I use ___ for time changes
2) The author note was for humor...
3) I spelled it wrong to avoid copywriters stuffs.
4) Will fix
5) I thought it would be a better idea for the plot
6) I can't really fix that... I kinda explained as they read books on webnovel for that...
7) Eldrid didn't pay much attention to Adrian's treatment due to shock
8) I actually research the meanings of names to make sure it's more symbolic.
9) Thanks
10) Glad you liked that
There was more I had wanted you to see... chapter 8 is where things really get started.
I try to treat the System more like a person to keep it interesting, I dont really focus on it...
Someone should write a story about a world where everyone is a reincarnated genius from other worlds. Then MC is the first child born as a non-reincarnated human. The parents are confused on why their child doesn't start speaking and displaying genius from a young age. They don't understand how to raise a non-reincarnated human. MC struggles in school since he has the development of an ordinary child instead of a 20, 40, 500, etc. year old man. He comes to hate the reincarnators for their discrimination and bullying against him when he was young. Now we follow the MC as he rises to power, uncovers the mysteries of the reincarnators, and seeks to restore balance to this twisted world.
Someone feel free to steal my idea lol. Just put a little blurb in your synopsis that the idea came from Lord SnoozySloth the Great!
SnoozySloth haha! That would be fun! Let's see who finishes their current original and works on that!
