I made my first webnovel because I really love the idea of The Legendary Mage. I've always been into fantasy novels and even wanted to write one. This is the perfect opportunity I needed. If you guys could check it out, I'd really appreciate it a lot! I only wrote one chapter so far, but I'll continue working hard on it. Thank you!

https://www.webnovel.com/book/12022477505776105

The Mage of the Millennium
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Synopsis:
Pithar his whole life has been a failure. His father is the Archmage ruling over the magic kingdom and his siblings all geniuses. The disgrace to the family is condemned to be a forbidden necromancer in the Magi Trial and ordered to be executed by his own father. Set free by his doting older sister he must weave his way around a world unfamiliar to him. He must discover the hidden facets of magic and learn to use the strongest yet most vulnerable part of him, his emotions. Follow Pithar's journey as he explores a world unfamiliar to him and discovers the art of treachery, betrayal, and agony. All he has left is hope.

    ImBloo

    Thanks for the review mate! I appreciate the advice a lot. Your writing overall is quite good, but I'd suggest to change the cover a little bit. It seems a little unprofessional. Other than that great job!

        DarkTempest
        Man's gotta have priorities. I've barely got time to write. A new cover can wait.
        BTW, if you've got time, pls drop a review on my page. It'll be nice. Thanks :)

            https://www.webnovel.com/book/12023947106773305/Bloodline-Mage
            Synopsis: A moment of Pure Despair and Fury awakened his bloodline. A Bloodline that was genuinely terrifying and its holder a Mage that would Ruthlessly dominate every single realm in existence. Follow Adrianus Von Frazier on his Journey of Blood and Fire.

            Can someone please check out my story and tell me their viewpoints on it. Just posted the first chapter and I need some positive or constructive feedback.

            ImBloo
            Reviewed. Sorry it isn't a particularly interesting review. Gaming/virtual reality is my most disliked genre in general, so I have a very hard time getting interested in a story about it. Copy of my review pasted below.

            Disclaimer: 5 stars given despite whatever I write below. Review is as of 3 chapters read. Also, I don't like gaming/virtual reality novels. I can never get invested in them. Not even the top and best of the genre. So, I'll be leaving that bias out of my review. This leaves my review a bit bland since it only examines the technical aspects of the story.

            Writing Quality: 5/5. I didn't spot any grammar mistakes. I wasn't paying super close attention, so there may be minor ones I missed. Or maybe he really had none. Either way, the author has great writing.
            Updates: 5/5 as of this review. Novel is a few days old with 7 chapters.
            Story Development: 4/5. MC is betrayed. We get to watch as he plots his revenge. Written well. Minus a point for lack of originality by using a super common cliche within the genre. I don't deduct points for most cliche, but I don't even read this genre and know the cliche for MC gamer to get betrayed, then X happens, then he starts planning his revenge and comeback.
            Character Design: 4/5. Good emotional descriptions for MC. Minus a point for lack of describing character looks for MC and other characters.
            World Background: 5/5. Great opening with the battle, mages, warlocks, dragons, etc. It will probably pull you right into the story if your into gaming novels.

                SinisterSmile
                To edit an existing chapter on PC you just open up inkstone where you would normally start a new chapter. Click on Published. Find and select the chapter. Make your changes and click update. If you're using app then I have no idea.

                    SnoozySloth
                    I understand :)
                    I'll try and put a fresh spin on the concept.
                    Thanks for the review.

                    I only describe people when they become relevant to the plot. Spending several paragraphs describing someone that will disappear for several dozen chapters is a waste of time IMO.

                    And I prefer using few words and letting readers filling in the blank with their imagination.
                    "He (the bartender) looks to be 50 years old, stout and strong. His arm muscles are bulging under the thin brown tunic. The thick mustache wiggles as he speaks."
                    "The man is in his mid-thirties, ruggedly handsome and confident. He extends his hands and gives a warm smile."
                    The MC's description is given when he created the character tho. His avatar looks exactly like him, until he changes it.

                        SnoozySloth I think it's pretty unfair to other writers if I win it, get featured...

                        But don't plan to commit to the novel... :crying_cat_face:

                        Probably the most I would do is 3 chapters a week of it...

                            SinisterSmile
                            I've decided not to leave a review for your novel. I didn't get far enough in the story or world to provide an accurate judgement. However, your grammar needs a lot of work. I would have likely given it a 2.5/5 at best. I could get the gist of what was going on, but a lot of the details were not understandable by me. I spent about 40 minutes rewriting/fixing 1/4th of your first chapter. I commented the fixed version on your first chapter so that you can use it as a reference for improvement in the future.

                              ImBloo
                              It depends. Several dozen chapters means the character definitely needs a name or nickname and some descriptors. One-chapter characters can be vaguely described and thrown away.

                              So the MC is described further in the story? =p. Fair enough, but I think it's better to describe MC as soon as possible. I might imagine a blond fatty American until you tell me he's a black haired Asian! Okay, probably not since you used an Asian name. Lol.

                                  Ierrech
                                  Hmm, I disagree. As long as you continue the story then I think it's fair. I've seen quite a few top authors that only do 3, 4, or 5 chapters a week instead of the standard 7 or more. Besides, the truly good novels will rise eventually or get featured on Trending Originals in the future. Now, if you plan on completely dropping the novel, then yeah, that would suck for your competitors and readers. I'm kind of surprised you won't be sticking with it though when your new novel is beating your old novel already even with your old novel featured. I can understand wanting to finish your older book first though.

                                  On that note. It seems like you might lose anyways. Looks like Death Incarnate is rapidly catching up. https://www.webnovel.com/book/12016679805766705/Death-Incarnate

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