Hello! Mines is right here!
http://wbnv.in/a/69iB497
Krea and Zi Adventures is a mystical tale about two girls. Full of action and drama, read it now!
Hello! Mines is right here!
http://wbnv.in/a/69iB497
Krea and Zi Adventures is a mystical tale about two girls. Full of action and drama, read it now!
ForerunnerOfSky sure but my review or feedback will take time. I am still behind in chapters.
The_Drunkencrater Heres my review from reading up to chapter 10,
Has a interesting and unique premise, the first person perspective is a bit unconventional but can work, its a bit to lighthearted for my liking but thats personal preference. Action is a little bit dissapointing it doesn't have much detail or depth to the actions, the character's thoughts and motivations are very well written, solid grammar has some good moments of humor. I think it has potential to grow but just needs lots of improvement and eventually you'll get there.
I think currently from the first 10 chapters I would rate it, 3.5 stars out of 5
P.S : dont forget to read the latest 10 chapters of mine, please, preferably from my One Night Arc, chapter 43
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ForerunnerOfSky Read the arc till ch 50 smthng. The story flows and feels like a hollywood movie or something. Very American... That's for sure. I like it though, it's very relaxing? Serious? Something I would read to relax and be entertained? I'm not sure how to describe how I feel about it. It's a good story, but it's not my cup of tea. I'm more inclined towards eastern stories, as they tend to be more exaggerated(flashy) and quick towards the the ending of an arc(less detailed). Personally, I do not like the parts in your story that I might forget after forty chaps. Feels unnecessarily complex and a waste of time for readers that are excited for the outcome of an arc. That's just my preference. If I read to relax though and not to overload my mind with continuous and evergrowing arcs that I get addicted to, then this is at least a 7 out of 10!
B_l_a_n_k_2167 Thank you for patiently waiting and I apologize for my late review. I enjoyed your story and it is very interesting. I added it to my library.
The_Drunkencrater Hmmm, I was aiming more for like 'The Raid or Man from Nowhere feeling... so is my writing too tedious and detailed? (not going to lie that hurts a little)
Was the arc at least interesting?
Allen_Clay012 thats fine
ForerunnerOfSky it is an interesting arc, persay, as it does give off the man from nowhere feeling like you hoped. It’s similar to what Ive seen in movies where MC is like some top agent whos been retiring or something but does one last mission as a favor, so yeah, I guess the feeling is there… well… the too much detail is just my preference tho, cus personally I wouldnt want to read through a whole lot of details that id forget anyway. If its too extra details, i would rather have a glaring piece but easy to read and remember info somewhere in the beginning and then later make some small referrences back to that info while slightly expanding it further, adding a bonus of mystery or coolness to the story too maybe. Idk honestly…