zeroshyne There are many grammar mistakes. Rather, it is the word arrangement that makes it hard to keep up with the flow even when you know what the author is trying to convey, this drops interest in many even when they find the story itself very intriguing.
The story setting is nice and complete with the use of the right vocabulary and all. It fits well in the martial world adaptation. I find the interactions between characters quite wholesome. The naming sense....it is quite humoring. This is a good way to keep the readers interested and avoid confusion with complicated names.
All in all the book is good. Just a few changes and it will be souring.

      XuXinyang
      Ty, its from an anime called fate/grand rder if you're interested, I'm gonna change it soon to something original if my book gets bigger

        Revamping12345 I was kinda confused at the first chapter since it was all something I couldn't understand but all is well. It was English after all, Phew~
        It is my first time reading such a trope/genre and setting so this opinion is not based on the book concept.
        The book is very simplistic and has little depth in character. I am not sure if it is because you plan to do more development in the future. I mean, he is someone who has seen primordial and even fought chaos. It should be given he is more...complex than average humans.
        As I reader, I find it hard sympathizing with him since not much of his emotions are known to us. You should make use of descriptive writing , facial expressions, real world estimations to make us a part of the book as well. Spice it up.
        The synopsis as intriguing as it is, it is also very confusing on the plot.
        You are using the first person's POV which can be tricky. The remedy to that is setting though bubbles to show his thoughts. Using body language to read others emotions or thoughts. Being more expressive and descriptive in what the MC sees, hears, feels etc. He is our window to the book world after all.
        To round it up, the idea is amazing really. It is original and I would love to read more if you update.
        ME:// Let me know if you would like a review. Please review my book as well.

            XuXinyang thank you for your feedback on my novel. I am reworking them.

            Also, I read the first two chapters of blade and miracle. The beginning of the story is a little slow. However, I do like the pacing of the story so far. It's pull you in and you want to know what is next for these set of characters. Also, I like the name are simple and easy to remember. There was a few parts where didn't make sense and I had to reread it. Overall, I like where the story is heading and I will b adding it to my library. Keep up the good work.

                XuXinyang yeah do a review on mine ty, and post the link to yours so I can do a review on yours as well

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