Hello! I'm definitely going to take a look at your novel. In return, I hope you also take a look at mine
https://www.webnovel.com/book/12336976706296405/Game-in-Middle-Earth
Promoting my new Webnovel!
wow I will be checking yours. Please do check mine as well and learn from each other. Cheeers!
https://www.webnovel.com/book/12499305105644805/Memories-of-Grace
Sagerwisk Hi bro! Love to read your work. here is mine as well. Please do not that im only @ level 1 as an author as this is my first time writing. here is my link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12499305105644805/Memories-of-Grace
ChibaNozumi
- I think you should spend a little more time on the backstory. Specifically, the Empire, PROJECT, how they took over the world. Also the new king's actions are ridiculous in a sci-fi setting.
- Think about the villain's motivation for taking over the world.
- Did you notice that during chapter 2 and 3 you mention Atsushi Yukine 30 times? Decide whether you want this guy to be the MC, or Futaba Kou.
ImBloo Can you take a look at my novel. I want to know if my initial chapters have enough clarity wrt plot, storyline and character conversations. Thanks in advance.( Since I'm only a couple of chapters away from completing my first volume, I need a bit of an expert opinion)
Title: I Hate Systems
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12200080106081005/I-Hate-Systems
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iamnaz7 thanks! Will read it during my free times.
Sagerwisk will do sir. Thanks!
ImBloo Hello! Thanks for the concern. THe mc of the story is definitely Atsushi Yukine written in the point of view of Futaba Kou. The backstory will be widened in the succeeding chapters, as of now, the story will focus on how YUKI and Yukine met. Will have the backstory written in the chapters 5 onwards. The villain's motivation will be set when the main villain was introduced but as of now, he/she has not yet been introduced to the readers. Also, the new king's action is very rare or should I say, bizarre for a sci-fi genre but I like it more when it is bizarre to see it that way. Though, I love your feedback and will definitely work on the backstory as soon as possible.
iamnaz7 I have read your story, by the way, I love it how you write the story. Hope for your success on continuing your story.
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ChibaNozumi Oh fascinating. Designed like late 19th - mid 20th century classics. Like Sherlock Holmes where Watson narrates Sherlock's adventures or The Great Gatsby where Caraway is the voice where Gatsby is the protagonist.
It will be tricky to pull this off, but it's been done before. It's also a very unpopular style nowadays but the writing experience will be rewarding.
Good luck. I'm biased against Mecha, so I will not be reading. But I hope that you will succeed.
KoraL hahaha yeah. Though it will not be a purely mech-mecha genre. It is more like Code Geass that is not exactly Code Geass if you get what I am pointing here. Though, thanks for the words of encouragement.
KoraL Definitely 2nd POV stories are tricky to pull off, that is why it is more challenging than third or first POV stories. I also noticed that the majority of stories here are written in either 1st or 3rd POV that is why I decided to pull this 2nd POV instead.
Will have a read of yours and write my feedback soon!
Here's mine if you can do the same for it: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12523274806741605/33757957699194769/Goddess-of-War/Prologue-(1)---The-Father
