yaoyueyi nah, this is a great chance for me to learn as well. Thanks for helping everyone out! 
Synopsis 101
I'd love to receive some help as well! My novel is the throne of the eternal, here's the updated synopsis.
The world is filled with essence, a powerful life force and existence that permeates all of reality. In this world, the drama of good and evil unfolds. A man and a woman stand who separated by time.
The great demon that keeps resurrecting and the fairy that stands in the vanguard guarding the world. The ancient calls from an immemorial age send the world into chaos.
The end has finally approached and the throne of God above the star descends. Atop the seat is no man, it is an empty throne yet to be claimed.
This is a story of a great demon, who does as his heart pleases in the advent of the Eternal Throne!
UnjustlyUnderpaid why do you have to fear when I'm here. This is the synopsis I currently use. Please give me a better one.
Title: I Hate Systems
Synopsis:
The 7th natal war comprised of millions of races from cultivators and elemental shifters to divine beings and gods battling each other in a frenzy to attain racial royalty.A lone injured god whose entire race got wiped-out chanced upon Earth while fleeing and decided to terminate its life. The God's essence after its death shattered into a million fragments and descended onto Earth. The fragments under the natural laws of Earth got absorbed into various substances from insects and animals to humans and computers welcoming the start of what you encounter in every story.
MC's synopsis: 11th November 2018 on a rare rainy day in the city of Hong Kong, Li Qiu walked dejectedly in a local park ignoring the mocking cry of the pittering rain thinking about his day's work as an international translator when all of a sudden, golden radiance spread out from the skies followed by a series of conch sounds roaring out for every measurable creation to realize followed by the bursting of various mobile phones, computers, random insects, pets and....humans. Li Qiu in a fit of panic reached for his phone when a golden light shone on the phone which seeped into him.
<...ding?...>
" damn you....'ding' my ass, get out from my body"
General Synopsis: Follow the story of a group of companions as they watch apocalypse descend onto earth, fight for survival and try to reign supreme against overpowered enemies. Follow the story as the plot slowly unravels about the creation of the Earth and its status in the infinite cosmos as the MC and his companions eventually figure out the truths about the universe.
Overlord_Venus You synopsis isnât bad (other than being lengthy is all three paragraphs is part of one synopsis
) I noticed quite a few grammatical changes that could be made like
âA lone injured god whose entire race got wiped out chances upon earth...â
You could add commas Here and make it flow a bit better
âA lone injured god, whose entire race got wiped out, chances upon earth...â
And just small things like this.
Also instead of listing things the way you did it,
âVarious mobile phones, computers, random insects, pets, and...humansâ
You could just try generalizing it.
âVarious electronic devices, animals, and even humansâ
This way it leaves you more room for creative additions. Your original list limited you to only giving powers to bugs and pets (like dogs and cats) but the new way gives you a chance for stuff like...tiger or lions. Basically it gives you a larger assortment of animals to work with if you do wish.
Only phones and computers are affected? Why not different devices as well. This is optional and really does depend on whether or you like it or not.
Try removing unneeded words, donât make this too lengthy. Example
âOn a rare rainy day in the city of Hong Kong.â
You could explain that it rarely rains in your chapters and instead of âin the city of Hong Kongâ just do âHong Kong cityâ
You donât want the synopsis to just look like a text wall, that could be bad.
There are a few other personal things I would want to change, but this is too personal so I wonât mention it. Not a bad synopsis, just needs a few tiny...tiny changes. Changes which by the way are also optional!
UnjustlyUnderpaid damn, this is awesome. Thanks for the help. Just in time for my breakthrough
Hello, would you guys mind to help me with my synopsis too? Thanks before :)
My novel is "Serendipity Happens"
Synopsis:
A letter came to her out of the blue:
1st day: 'Hello, Miss. Do you have a name? Or can I call you mine?'
2nd day: 'Excuse me, I seem to have lost my phone number. Can I have yours?'
3rd day: 'Beautiful, do you have any raisins? No? Then, how about a date?'
Who would believe, the famous cold-as-ice President of internet giant Agnolo Holdings is a master at cheesy pick-up lines?!
. . .
Her name is Callaluna. Her parents left her in front of the orphanage when she was just a baby with a promise to take her back. But, they never come.
Until one day, the orphanage she lived in caught a fire and burned to ashes with no one survived. Except her.
With nowhere to go, she wandered the street by herself trying to find a place she could call home once more.
But, again, fate played her. She died because of a truck ran over her.
Is it the end?
No.
For her, it's only the beginning.
The story is about a girl who suddenly died but then got a second chance to live again and came back to her past a few years before. The 'letter' part is when she meet the ML in her second life.
Actually, I added that part to rouse potential readers' interest to read my novel.
Please do help me out too.
My book is The Archaic Elements, a cultivation based story. I have changed my synopsis to this-
Avis Realm- a space sealed in time.
Here, Cultivators shatter the Shackles which bind their Mortal Soul from reaching the Divine. Ten shackles to Divinity remains the destination yet no one has ever succeeded in a thousand years.
In this world dominated by strength drifts a kid who has no idea of where his journey leads. Neither is he aware of the truth regarding his ORIGIN.
Azyl felt his world collapse when he heard his father cry out in pain. He didn't quite understand what his parents were saying, neither did he try to grasp what had happened. In his mind only one thought revolved as he could only think of one kind of a person. An Elementalist.
Only they had powers which could make a person writhe in pain for ten years. And he had aspired to become like them one day. But now all Dreams felt so far away. He didn't want to become someone like the person who hurt his father. Yet fate had other plots designed for him.
He was forced to enter the Elements Academy in West Cloud City, against all his wishes. He had made up his mind to never study Elemental arts.
Until he came face to face with the cruel reality of life.
A strange encounter leads to him inadvertently going down a journey that he never could have imagine.