Overlord_Venus You synopsis isn’t bad (other than being lengthy is all three paragraphs is part of one synopsis
) I noticed quite a few grammatical changes that could be made like
“A lone injured god whose entire race got wiped out chances upon earth...”
You could add commas Here and make it flow a bit better
“A lone injured god, whose entire race got wiped out, chances upon earth...”
And just small things like this.
Also instead of listing things the way you did it,
“Various mobile phones, computers, random insects, pets, and...humans”
You could just try generalizing it.
“Various electronic devices, animals, and even humans”
This way it leaves you more room for creative additions. Your original list limited you to only giving powers to bugs and pets (like dogs and cats) but the new way gives you a chance for stuff like...tiger or lions. Basically it gives you a larger assortment of animals to work with if you do wish.
Only phones and computers are affected? Why not different devices as well. This is optional and really does depend on whether or you like it or not.
Try removing unneeded words, don’t make this too lengthy. Example
“On a rare rainy day in the city of Hong Kong.”
You could explain that it rarely rains in your chapters and instead of “in the city of Hong Kong” just do “Hong Kong city”
You don’t want the synopsis to just look like a text wall, that could be bad.
There are a few other personal things I would want to change, but this is too personal so I won’t mention it. Not a bad synopsis, just needs a few tiny...tiny changes. Changes which by the way are also optional!
