Pgimz Review is done and posted.

zhiruyi
Assessed because even though the post wasn't directed toward me, it's in this thread. :P

Lord_of_Potatoes Talenta TheOGDuanChen ImBloo
Also assessed. https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/12/webnovel-assessments-18/

Lord_of_Potatoes
As for prose versus pace, certainly any good novel should have both. In terms of how VB's assesses, it has a slight deference for prose over pace. Webnovels, in general, focus more on pace over prose. However the defining point between a webnovel and a print book sold in a bookstore is the writing composition and style. Plenty of "classics" and bestsellers have very slow or little plot action, but for the thought and style of writing, they've gained acclaim.
In this way, rather than following the 'formula' of webnovels, distinctive of writing is weighed a little more heavily. This distinguishes, say, the cookie-cutter "cultivation" novels from the ingenious written 'cultivation' novels.
Making a system to assess webnovels is rather pointless since the caliber is lower and therefore more limited. Hopefully, by assessing them more seriously, even the best webnovels have room to grow beyond the online domain.
Taking all this with a grain of salt, every story is different, so one pace isn't correct for all. Just stay true to your style. You can always keep the longer copy and have a shorter one for mobile reading. Everybody's preferences are different.

                I'd say that the main difference (for webnovels) is the media.

                For example, I used to write for paper (nopes, never got published), and now I'm writing for the laptop screen.

                However, a lot of webnovels are made for the smart phone screen.

                Now a pleasant read is usually described in terms of language, textual layout and the big three, plot, character and setting. The problem is that the standard book-page more often than not is still taken for granted. Reading on a computer is close enough to the physical book, so the differences don't stand out as much.

                What differences? Well, there's another factor as well. Just glancing at a page should be pleasant as well. Most of us notice different fonts and size of fonts and are aware how those make an impact. Most of us notice, but are unaware, when text is graphocally pleasant to look at no matter fonts and font-size.

                Like

                for

                example

                why this text suddenly got hard to read.

                Sometimes I pick up my phone and read my own works. In that format a lot of the words I use are simply too long, and my way of handling dialogue interspersed with character activities creates huge chunks of text which, quite frankly, are hard to read. It just looks that different from when I'm reading it (that would translate into when I'm typing and editing my own text) on a computer.

                So I'd argue that an adaption of a webnovel into a physical book requires a lot more than line-editing. There's most likely a big need for structural editing as well.

                And this is just from a graphical point of view. When you start adding how what I feel is horribly rushed pacing reads just fine on the small screen, then we're opening an entirely different can of worms altogether.

                  StenDuring I always check over my chapters by looking at it with my phone after I am done on the laptop. Things that looked fine on laptop suddenly looks like a massive chunk of text on my phone. Any paragraph that takes up more than say 60% of my phone screen is getting split.
                  But when you go back to reading on laptop the new spacing hurts the eyes cuz it's so split up.

                      Hello, I'm new here :smile: (so pardon my lack of manner)
                      I would like feedback on my work, as it's my first time writing in English (I don't speak English). It does not need to be a full review as there are only two chapters published, just tell me what do you think about it.
                      I do really appreciate your attention, thank you!

                      Link to my work: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12998325006353005/Karana

                        Book_Keeper Just hi-jacking one of your posts.

                        I see that you're restructuring your site including some place holders. Point of View goes into TQ. Well, at least it does given the five factors you've chosen.

                        My experience as a reader on Wattpad, Royal Road and (now) Webnovel is that most authors are all over the place when it comes to picking a narrative voice dependent on the choise of point of view.

                        Initially authors need to handle FP and TP (and preferably stick to one), and after that it's a matter of understanding the difference between TP omni and TP limited. This, mildly put, isn't done at all.

                        The last part, where I find many flaws in my own writing, is how narration should change depending on which character we're experiencing the story from when multiple TP limited is chosen. I guess this coud be called narrative voice, even though I'm perfectly aware such a voice is needed no matter which point of view an author decides to run with.

                        Obviously this, the last part ties in with world (which you chose not to include) and character.

                        In the hands of an expert author, RL is also affected since the world experienced by a character with a vast vocabulary greatly differs from one shown from the point of view of a character with an equally limited langage tool box. To be honest I've only read a few dozen books where this is done well, and that's out of over 10K titles read.

                            Book_Keeper I'm very thankful for the in depth review, really. I guess it's definitely nice for the readers to point things out that the author (me) didn't even notice. Many, many thanks. :) I'll try to deliver better chapters once my break ends.

                              midnight_bloom Liked your story very much. Read just one chapter but found it gripping. Added to my library. Its a breath of fresh air without any CEO stuff.

                                  StenDuring Hi-jacking lol.

                                  POV is definitely tricky. Depending on the story, it could affect/be more relevant in different factors. You mentioned TQ and RL; PD could even be added because if the plot isn't clear due to a lot of voice switching, then that's a hit to comprehension and development. In that sense, other than a review, the assessment would have to be split into more specific factors to address all these story nuances. Hopefully the writing guide can address these concerns upon completion.

                                  For now anyway, I haven't been critiquing voice and style since that starts to lean toward reader preference rather than basic story constructs. Only when they cross into clarity and depth do I take them into consideration when assessing. Maybe one day I can factor in something that helps with directing stories based on reader preferences.....such as with tags hmm...

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