Writing contest #62
Attention: this tale contains mature subjects such as assault. Please read at your own discretion.
Synopsis: I’m but a tree, hence I cannot help you. My own roots are stuck in the belly of Mother Earth, hence I cannot reach you. No eyes adorn my bark, hence I cannot cry for you.
In the year 1500, a merchants daughter is assaulted. Traumatised but living, she ponders the morale of men under my branches.
Chryiss Hello. I’ve only been writing for a few weeks and this is the first time I enter a contest. I’m fully aware my work is flawed but I’ll like to improve. So if you find the time to review my work and give me some tips on how to become a better writer, it will be greatly appreciated. Do not spare me, I would love some brutally honest feedback. Thank you in advance and have a great day!
Since I'm just idling and waiting the time to pass, why not help my fellow daoist here.. haha
Hope my little PS would help...
Chryiss thank you for your thread... if you don't mind, please review mine... this is my enter for writing contest #61
https://www.webnovel.com/book/13347893706566905/The-Story-of-Dusk
She went to a place she shouldn't visit.
She took the path she should not have taken.
And…
She loves someone she shouldn't love.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/13360816005550605/The-World-Tree
12 Goddesses fight against the Demon Lord. When the Demon lord was about to win, they woke the sleeping Goddess, Hope.
But Hope was in the Pandora’s box fighting the forces of doom and keeping them at bay. When they opened the box, they released the harbingers of apocalypse along with Hope. In a final attempt to save the Universe, the 12 Goddesses gave the essence of their power in the form of a seed to Hope. She began her search to find a worthy soul to instill the seed with.
Ryan died in a pit sacrificing his life for his wretched family which was more interested in his money than him. His family never loved him, and by the time he realized it, it was too late. Their corruption and greed killed him and his trust in humanity.
Hope offered him a chance at a new life as the World Tree seed. Will he forget his past and learn to love again or will he become bitter and fail saving the Universe? With the fate of the World hanging in the balance, Ryan and Hope set out on an epic journey to save the Universe.
But before they can do that, they need to save themselves.
Please take a look and let me know if you have any suggestions!! Thank you. I will take a look at your submission later today.
My entry in contest 61: Player Killer
In a sentence, it's a video game world from an NPC's perspective, where players and NPCs interpret events very differently.
Synopsis:
In the world of New Dawn, the citizens seem to be suffering a divine punishment of some sort.
The monsters that plague them are worse then devils, demons, or depraved criminals.
The devils have their own twisted morality, demons are not intrinsically bad—they're just above humans in the food chain—and depraved could can at least be killed.
The undying, capricious monsters kill anything and everything, devouring all in their sights like a swarm of locusts. What's more, the lords and kings who should be protecting them seem to be working with these monsters.
When all seems lost, it falls to a young boy to save his people from these monsters… from the players.
…
In the players' eyes, he is a hidden boss—possibly even the final boss!
In the developers' eyes… what the heck is this bug?!
https://www.webnovel.com/book/13359315705546605/Player-Kⅰller
TwistedWhimsy Did you change it using mobile or computer? I find that the computer version updates better/quicker than mobile.
computer, it changed on main page, but still shows old one on forums
Awesome_Blossom Are you referring to me because I offered earlier, or to anyone following the thread? Either way I can take a look at it if you want.
TwistedWhimsy So is the one you want the devilish creature or the one with rows of people? On the forums, the image is linked to a url, so the image won’t change automatically.
At least, I’m not aware of dynamically linking the story cover to a url as I’ve had to upload the image on a free hosting site after uploading it as a cover on Webnovel.
was trying to switch to the demon like thing...
I see, I was using
with my story's number, the one in the URL --> 13350785505520005 in the ________________ space
EDIT: imgur worked thank ya kindly
My entry for Contest #61 :)
His silence spoke volumes.
Although Esha wasn't unfamiliar to the domineering bearings of nobility, this young man’s presence was unlike anyone else’s.
As expected of the next king.
Her heart sputtered with anxiety, but a weightless fluttering undeniably resided in her stomach. She cursed herself; indignant that she was attracted to her downfall’s pretty face.
His Highness, Crown Prince Nikos Alistair Aurum, raised a groomed brow. A chuckle escaped his lips, sparkling sapphire eyes trained on her.
“Am I so abhorrent that at first meeting, my fiancée already wishes to terminate our engagement?”
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Lady Esha Adelia Voleu was designed to be the villainess of an otome game.
For the commoner heroine’s designated happily ever after, the stars wrote that it would be at the cost of the her own future.
Unfortunately for the original plot, she quite liked her life—thank you very much.
Instead of opposing the protagonist's quest to win the hearts of all the capture targets, she would be the best wing woman this world had ever seen.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/13345978306559105/Crowns-are-for-the-Heroines
TwistedWhimsy Whoa! I never was able to pull up the cover image url before! I even looked at page source to see if it gave me a clue as to way show image in a new tab option didn’t appear. I just tried it out with mine, and it actually works! So cool, thanks for the tip!
It’s strange that the link didn’t work as it should on a coding sense... But I’m glad imgur worked out~
My first time writing a novel. Hope you can review please
For contest #61
Subject: Jane Smith
Synopsis:
My name is Jane Smith. I can fly and walk through walls. Seriously.
...
Fine. My soul can.
Sounds fun? What if you stumble upon a murder with no evidence or witnesses except 'you'?
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/13349444805516705
Thank you!
jikanyotomare Review done~
facelessunknown Maybe also add what your title and prompt number is?
