Ken_Raynous
A review or commentary like I did above would be awesome =].
If I am repeating a grammar mistake.
If and when I should add more imagery, and if I should, when would be the right time?
Also any good points so I can make sure to keep them in the future. =]
Anything that I cannot see or ask is often the best advice. Perhaps, the relationship between MC-FL is too cringe?
Perhaps I have too much introspection? Maybe my novel needs more action?
I need to expose myself to different viewpoints and see how my work presents itself.
Maybe it comes off as goofy when I want it to be serious etc.