My English is not very good, but I want to write a novel about western magic. Please help me evaluate it. Can you understand my brief introduction smoothly? ...... Please

Introduction to this book:

Here are magicians who can freeze rivers, paladins who can cut mountains with one sword, and golden titans who can tear dragons apart with both hands ...

Here is the Holy Spirit continent, a world full of endless opportunities and dangers!

I, Gavin Jones, with God's shop, am reincarnated here!

Dragons' genes, magic spells to destroy cities, life-prolonging drugs, weapons to kill gods ...

Everything will be mine!

Of course, the beginning of everything starts from the day I became the tulip baron ...

    My English is not very good, but I want to write a western magic novel, which friend can help me to see if my English standard is up to standard, and whether I can continue to write ...

    《Invincible store system》

    Holy Spirit Continent, Race Unlimited

    A holy mage who can summon meteorites; An orc empire with a population of billions; The alluring and noble spirit ...

    Gavin Jones was reborn here due to an accident.

    He also came with a magic necklace that calls itself the "invincible store system".

    [Dragon's Human Gene] [Ring of Soul] [Intensification Rune] [Advanced Cultivation Method] ... Everything can be bought in

    this store.

    This is the story of the birth of a great god!

    Of course, it all starts with Jones becoming the Baron of Flower Town ...

      I will read them all tomorrow, ill let you guys know when Im done and submitted my reviews! :) thanks!

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