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bitterreaderako21 sure ill review it. 
Need a review for my story and swap review if you like ^^/
Gourmet_DAO gee thanks! I'll start reviewing it now. Sorry imma late. Its my school's fault 
luciel_707 thanks so much! 
luciel_707 thanks so much!
bitterreaderako21 welcome 
bitterreaderako21 already reviewed. Your turn 
Gourmet_DAO already reviewed.
luciel_707 thanks for the review
The_Canary oh also can you review my story titled 'sceptix: the legend of magic?' Sorry for the request but i need some advises. The link is in the top post.
luciel_707 I wrote you an honest review. I liked the novel as a whole, although there are some incomprehensible moments in it. Rating 4 stars.
luciel_707 I wrote you an honest review. I liked the novel as a whole, although there are some incomprehensible moments in it. Rating 4 stars.
luciel_707 Thnx! Me too just now.
Need really a honest review.( call me a desperate but imma confuse rn.) Idm if its few but at least i want the other review swaps peeps are thruthful. Even you write a bad review in my story i accept it and give me a advice to improve it. I dont want a situation like ' i give you a 5 rate star so do the same' .-. What a wolf in sheep's clothing, we'll be honest to each others review thats it no more. Acccept the reviews and dont delete it even its a harsh or bad cause that will be the lesson in improving our novels that we create. Or do you want the other new readers to be fooled by the positive reviews in the story that are not really true but only a trading review + liar? Imma a sound a bit harsh but this is reality for the authors. Its not easy to become one but we tried for the sake of out purposes, we take risk especially our heart and mind if a peep saw a negative review she or he will be depressed and 50/50 chance to write or not again. But we can't lose hope here. They saying that because they have only one meaning 'improve more'. Keep improving until you walking to the bridge of success with the ones who supports you, and i know its a long journey but giving up is not the answer. If you did that then its already game over, life is not easy as a game right?
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luciel_707 Oooh, life is much more complicated, more difficult, full of trials and hardships of the way. But they pass, then relief comes, then do not forget to feed those in need with delicious food.
And even a 2 or 3 star review, if it is written honestly, without insults, but shows ways to improve a more useful review than 5 stars.
A friend will tell the bitter truth, the enemy is a sweet lie.
Swap reviews are also needed to advertise new novels, but honest reviews allow them to grow, develop, but only on condition that the author himself wants to go this difficult path.
We had an English teacher, a student volunteer from Texas, Miss Kew, and so she told us at the university that what the Americans say is your choice and you are not the victim of your choice. You can do everything if you make an effort, you will have motivation for this!
She is partially right. Provided that you do not need to survive, and you can just live. But this is an annoying particular.
In general, I’m not a writer, I don’t know much, but I am slowly learning, I’m learning new things, trying to apply this in my novels and reviews.
As Comrade Lao Tzu - The Road of Thousand Lee, said, begins with one step.
You & me can try and try to improve our novels
Gourmet_DAO Yep i totally agree well even my readers are few but looking forward to my updates then no problem xD. Im having a hard time in translating my story (its in my 4 notebooks) but still editing and editing that causing my eyes and head hurts but still continuing. Im a manga youtuber too and a student so it cost more time gosh but still never gonna stop typing and writing . (Well my eyes are in tears of joy till now cause of your review tho. )
luciel_707 Knowledge is needed, learning and working and writing short stories, that's cool !!!
But take care of your eyes! You can easily spoil them! If you work too much on a laptop or look too often into an iPhone.
For example, in my previous work, I read the old instructions for computers in 2000. There, according to the safety technique, it was necessary to work on the computer for no more than 4 hours! At intervals, take breaks of 20 minutes so that the eyes rest. Now it looks ridiculous.
Success in creative work!
If you write the raw material as it is, it takes me 750 words for about 2 hours, after the first editing a couple more hours, after the second 5 hours. That is, you can write 1 chapter per day.
If you just fill in the raw materials, without changes in the dialogs, without emotions, without romance, but just harsh everyday life in almost reality, then a chapter will take 2-3 hours. But the quality will be worse than the 6 chapters you read. Therefore, you need to edit.
As Ghibli’s studio 1995 said in the Japanese anime, Whisper of the Heart, that in order to get a good job, it needs to be polished a lot, then it will be good. But I think, at the first stage, you can write the raw materials themselves, stories to the very end, do not quit. Bring to the end of the story. And then they will rewrite history, paying attention to grammar. One of the possible options.
I can give yours a look through and see if I can offer some suggestions. I try my best to give a honest opinion and constructive criticism, even when it's not of a genre I like. You can take a look at my past reviews and see if that's what you are looking for.
In return, you can give mine a try. I don't necessarily need a review, but it would be good if you can leave some chapter comments to let me know your opinion.
luciel_707 done! :)
Gourmet_DAO thanks for your concern! 
I'll take care of it since I don't want to in blurry sight state.
Gourmet_DAO we can do this, we have to or no story ending for the characters. It will be sad tho. Sometimes I'm so weird in myself to the point that i feel my characters are looking forward too in my work for their story lol they are one of my inspirations too. Even they're not real. What a tragic reality.