Nou This story takes place at different times (several novels). It all began in the Tang era, then the action takes place in the early 10s of the 21st century, after in the 20s of the 21st century.

The main, initial idea was in a coin, which could arouse in a person his hidden natural instincts, the so-called super power.

In the second part (Farmer Dara), I wanted the owner of a coin, coins, for some time, it would be better to write in English without grammatical errors))) I could foresee what would happen to him in 10 minutes, 1-2 days. I read in the Torah, in a verse about Noah, that a person is not able to predict what will happen to him in a minute. And here the story is a little fiction. Therefore, the glanced hero for a while can see 70 percent of what might happen to him. After that I used my knowledge in agribusiness (I had been doing it for two years) and sent the main character to the farm.

The third part (the young years of Indiana Jones - that is, Dara, college years).

This is effective laziness! Everything must be done in a thrill and not through force, then there will be joy from what is read. Pros can from chapter 1 understand what weaknesses are. I myself am so on the subject, and here I am a noob))

No, Dara is him, a man and not a woman. Thank you for noting that I will correct the typo.

I am grateful to you for your help then, I rewrote the chapters, now they are more lively and less documentary. Thesarius is brilliant. It somehow reminds me of gestures and symbols of how people behave in different situations. Now I also began to change it. Thank you for opening my eyes to these new opportunities! Respect!

Thank you, at the expense of Dna from dreams, I will correct!

Then the question is how to smoothly move on to this?

Thank you so much for your help, I will correct it! Respect!

I am glad to communicate with you and receive new information, it really helps!

      Veronica8 I would be happy to receive a full and detailed review. Now the rating is not important for me, I'm just trying to improve my letter. But in your words there is concern for the author. Since alas, or fortunately, new reviewers, for some reason rely like on a crutch, on previous reviews.

      But still, I wanted you to leave your review as a review, then I can quickly find it.

      I will be waiting for your honest feedback with interest. It seems I will have to rewrite history again. But it may take another 2 weeks)))

        Gourmet_DAO I like the emotional aspect of it, but the reader is not aware of what to care about. The introduction needs to quickly set the stakes and give the reader massive hints about the world in it.

        It's not griping because currently when the reader opens the book. There is no danger etc, just what appears to be random panic. And, the first sentence typo really is offputting.

        Because of the power of the first sentence typo and the lack of world-building right off the bat, I would have stopped reading as a normal reader. But, as I am reviewing I kept going.

        The whole thing with the cup is a little odd, I get what you attempted but we gotta work on that implementation. <3 And, more importantly, we still have not learned why Dara is so raddled. The start of the novel is where you have to establish the world, hook us in and give the reader an idea of who the current POV is even if they are not the protag.

        Then you jump into details which I have no context for such as book 01090 something about a city and you tossed into something about 470767.

        Currently, I am confused and all I know is that the MC is panicked. But, more importantly, I don't have the desire to keep track of all his stuff. From what I read, its earth from now or into the future and elements of a magical realism novel.

        It's all too much of a burden to keep in my head and I have not been given a reason to care about this MC nor can I connect to him. If I were you, I would consider altering the starting point.

            Acutelittletrap Thanks for the idea. The only question is how to implement this. If it’s not difficult, could you give an example of how to do this?

            At the expense of numbers, this is a cipher ... but how can I make the tode reader light up with this cipher and want to know what is hidden behind it, I don’t know? Maybe then, in general, remove the numbers from the text and just send Dara to the archive? Without any secrecy, secret societies, simple, clear.

            Go straight to the search for treasures rather than desk work in the archives?

            If it’s not difficult for you, could you give advice on how to do this?

            Thanks in advance.

                Acutelittletrap Thank you for the interesting thought. as you said, I re-read the chapter, and clearly saw all those mistakes that you told me. I rewrote it, it has changed almost 90 percent! But this is only the raw materials and the first grinding. It seems to me that the chapter turned out to be more understandable. But still it left the numbers, though only one group.

                    Nightmare_Taichou

                    0 - chapter

                    I will write my thoughts in each chapter I read, and after that I will summarize the general result. So I have to split my review into several parts. My English is not so good, so there may be misunderstandings in understanding, if you ask anything, I will explain what I meant.

                    Synopsis - for some reason, Mark Twain’s story “The Prince and the Pauper” reminded me immediately. But the story sounds very exciting interest in the novel!

                    Oh, reading chapter 0, I caught myself thinking that I had already met such a hero somewhere, I read at least two short stories with this type, and he was also Japanese. I hope that your romance is not fan fiction and not cliché! Since it would be very disappointing. I do not want this! Hope this is not the case!

                    Here, the choice of Japanese names is of interest, they are all very loud, famous, behind them already have their own stories from the real earthly world. Does this have anything to do with the choice of names? or did the author simply select them as the Japanese names that are heard?

                    What is alarming is that there are too many heroes. I have more of them, but I'm slowly starting to get confused in them. Having two or three heroes is enough. But maybe this is just an author’s idea? It is not up to me for the reader to decide.

                    It is good that there is an additional 0 chapter, it gives the reader introductory information about the character of the heroes, the worlds in which they live. This is great, this is a big plus!

                        1st chp

                        Is curious eye color something meaning? Some characterization of the heroine? The described interior of the room, then he will still appear in the novel or not?

                        But the first chapter I liked the plasticity of the dialogues, they are natural IMHO.

                        But with the magic circles breaks, but I'm glad that I was mistaken, the novel is not cliché, this is an original work.

                        And the plot is famously twisted !!!

                        The transfer of Japanese, Chinese, American, probably everyone would say that? It reminds a plot about the Normal Japanese Schoolboy. But manga and reality are two different things. What goes cliché again? I hope not.

                        It's just that the immunity of a modern person is worse than that of those who lived a couple of centuries ago. From viruses (like Hebert Wales's about Martians) the main character could make ends very quickly, but I don’t know if the magic of healing would help him?

                        Oh phone, had the phone functions from the short story "I have an estate in the apocalyptic world"? It seems a lot of borrowing from other short stories.

                          Primate Thank you so much, Bro Tao! Yes, I really appreciate the help, goodwill, advice!

                          Many thanks to these savvy Taoists who follow the path of enlightenment!

                          As I read, correct, rewrite, and rewrite chapters. I hope I can finish this process and enjoy reading the novel of respected Bro!

                          Respect!

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