I am offering up my services (mainly because I like to write and read) and will comment on your story with what I feel about it. I promise constructive criticism and all the love in the world.

I have some time on my hands, so you can leave a link and a summary of what your story is about. You get priority if you comment on my book (might as well profit off of this thread). But remember. I want your honesty. I only want to improve.

My Story:
https://www.webnovel.com/book/15471183105548605

You can also have a discussion with me on my discord account: SunScar9#8313
I would love to help out.

    SunScar9 Thank you! I'd love your help.

    My story: Cross Worlds: A Tale of Two Boys Who Swapped Worlds

    genre(s): Fantasy/Magic/Action/Adventure

    Summary:
    Two worlds: Earth and Sekai—a world where magic and technology coexist.

    Two boys—Tachibana Yuri. An ordinary Japanese boy with a normal life, and has a love for manga.

    Yuri Tachibana. A rebellious, short-tempered Third Prince of the Saishi Kingdom. He's known notoriously for his recklessness and punk-like behaviour, the headache of the royal family.

    What will happen when they accidentally switch worlds? Chaos and hilarity of course.

        MisterImmortal Thank you for trusting me. I have left you a comment on the first chapter. I am slowly making my way through the rest of the story as it stands. Good job. Keep writing. Remember, practice makes perfect!

          SunScar9
          Would love comments. Here's mine.

          Title: My attack stat is negligible, so I can't help but rely on critical attacks to succeed

          Genre: Fantasy/Isekai/Magic/Adventure/Cooking

          Summary:
          Having been summoned to another world, Claude Evers is devastated to find out that he has no attack or magic proficiency. In a world of swords and magic, Claude endeavors to become his master's...chef? Despite this turn of events, he soon finds himself relying on his wit and strange abilities to stand by his master's side. With such fearsome enemies in this world, what solutions can Claude hope to cook up?

              SunScar9

              Title - Because I simply love you.

              Synopsis -

              It was supposed to go all well. But all hell broke loose. When? and Why?

              Nana was living a simple yet contended life. She owned a small restaurant, had two cute but naughty brothers and her best friend. That was her small and happy world.

              Then one day, after a chance meeting with Nana, Madam Chen of the second most prestigious Chen family instantly liked her for her son. After a series of events, it was decided to announce Nana and Chen Jianyu's engagement in the Chen Corporations celebration banquet.

              Everything was going pretty well untill the night of the banquet; when Nana was woken up by a man, which to her horror was none other than Chen Jianyu's cousin. And to make matters worse he was already married.

              A big conspiracy. A trap. But set by whom? Who wants to destroy her?

              One thing is for sure. Nothing is as simple as it seems to be.

              https://m.webnovel.com/book/15229190406594805

              Please do let me know about your suggestions. This is my first time writing. So I really need some feedback. I will read and comment on your novel as well.😊 Thank you.

                  Title: Deep Cuts

                  Synopsis: Iris Taylor has struggled with great loss after losing both her mom and sister. She learned how to take care of her own self while her Dad remained crippled with heartbreak. It was not easy for the both of them but Iris harbored anger towards her Dad during those times. Her perspective of men had changed within a span of two years. She had instilled in her mind that men are not reliable and therefore, not to be trusted.

                  Entering third year in high school, Iris is greeted by two of her classmates, Duncan and Kieran, who seem to pop out everywhere she goes. Together, the two guys make a whirlwind out of Iris' year--one in the pursuit of love and the other in the pursuit of who-knows-what.

                  Will the appearance Duncan and Kieran be able to change Iris for the better or not?

                  Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/15502197406777805/41613551416170181

                  It only has two chapters since I just started writing it the other day but still hoping for criticism. Thank youuu

                    SunScar9
                    Title: Winter's Magic.
                    Sypnosis:
                    This December, Jack Frost has come to town. Literally.

                    Summer despises winter. Not because of the fact that her name is of the opposite season, but because the snow has cost her a lot in her life.

                    But when a devilishly beautiful man walks into her small family coffee shop, ordering an iced white caffè mocha with extra ice, she suddenly seems to start taking a liking to the cold.

                    His pale white hands seem to burn her with his fiery touch. He is different, something Summer is intrigued with. And she is determined to find out what it is.

                    Jack Frost is mostly known for bringing the cold, but she's about to find out that he can crank up the heat too. It's about to get really cold this winter. Good thing Jack's gonna be there to keep her warm.

                        SunScar9

                        Hi. I have read your novel and left a review on it. Please try my novel too. I have posted it above - Because I simply love you. I would really love some feedback. 😊

                            A review with my story will be really appreciated. I really need to know what other ppl think about it. Thank you.

                            Sustaining the King's Life
                            https://www.webnovel.com/book/14781766305602705/Sustaining-the-King's-Life
                            Synopsis:
                            Faustina Heilen is a Witch's apprentice, possessing a 'special blood' which is desired by Slave Traders. She presided in the mountains to escape from slavery while practicing medicine with her master, Eula. This has been her 'normal life' with her sixteen years of existence.

                            Until one night, in Eula's death bed, a man named Jonathan came and forcefully 'collected' Eula's body to use necromancy in order to resurrect her from the dead. At the same time, a man who is least likely to be in Faustina's home came to propose a completely different deal.

                            A summon to the castle from the king, Alexander Octavius Ein Feuerkrieger IX, himself. A battle they must win before anything else. A battle in order to get Eula back from Jonathan.

                            A contract to lengthen the young king's life.

                              Hey there SunScar9
                              This is my new story book SILENCE : says it all
                              Link:
                              https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/15195572205365605?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4306606724

                              Synopsis:
                              After being framed and raped FIZA YAQUB, daughter of a famous lawyer WAZIB YAQUB came back from jail and was facing a new world. Now, she is slut slept with 3 men.
                              She was fighting with her menal illness, with her dark future when one day, she saw one of her rapists has been murdered.

                              Hope you will like it. I am very much aware of tgat I have gramatical mistakes. But, I am confused where should i change them? If you can point out those points that would be much appreciate.

                                  SunScar9 I thank you for your kind heart and hard work for giving away your time to do something like this. If the story is too long you don't have to read all of it. Just providing your honest opinions for the first 7-10 chapters is good enough.

                                  Title: Beyond The Primordials
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                                  Synopsis:

                                  When Yin Hui was born, the heavens trembled. Out of fear, the primordial gods crippled his clan and himself, stripping them of their ability to cultivate.

                                  Rendered powerless, his clan was driven to near extinction and Yin Hui was condemned to a life of slavery. After 15 years of torturous servitude, he encounters a stroke of fortune that would change his fate forever, bestowing upon him an alternate method of cultivating.

                                  With a new lease on life, he exacts vengeance against all who wronged him, and strives to ascend beyond the primordials!

                                  "If the heaven's deny my existence! Then I shall become an existence that denies the heaven's!"

                                  An eye for an eye, a tooth for a tooth. Follow the story of a boy who was born bearing a grudge towards the highest of beings!

                                      It's the first story I make, so if you can give the most honest opinion I appreciate it. I need to know how this story is mine.

                                      Book:

                                      https://m.webnovel.com/book/15528240206873505

                                      Sinopse:
                                      With a very peculiar name, James always wanted to have super powers and be immortal, and he did, or almost. With lucid dreams James can imagine being a Superman and flying through the skies. On a fateful day he finds a dubious book, at a dubious price, with a dubious description, after which his dreams have never been the same.

                                        SunScar9
                                        Cool. I'll take a look at yours over the next few days. Currently swamped with work.

                                            kazesenken Hey! You don't need to. The swap thing was a joke. I would have read it regardless!

                                                acoreen Commented under chapter 2. Feel free to contact me if you have any questions. Looking forward to talking to you!

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