Rumblings of a mad beast below.

Created this thread for anyone seeking feedback and honest reviews for their newly written novel, well, including myself (Yeah I know... Shameless... But its called "Chains of Despair" so you should check it out..... Please????).

But if you're serious about your book then comment below so that I can read it and offer some honest feedback. Sharing is caring.

      Gayu2594
      Sorry, I really don't read romance. I don't think that I would be able to help you.

          Elude

          Haha just gave a honest review on yours. Its quite good especially that its Eastern themed and even the writing itself has an Eastern feel. Would definitely recommend.

          My book is just plot twists and cliffhangers hahaha

            kazesenken I really enjoy your novel. The characters seem very suited to the typical anime style and I can very easily visualise them. I also liked the world building that you have done -especially the demons. The only thing I thought was weird, was the beginning of the second volume. I don't know if I was just unobservant, but from my perspective that whole thing kinda came out of the blue.

            I like the quirky and interesting characters, but I find the contrast of that against the darker parts of the story -like the beginning of volume two and the recent chapter with Cornelius- is a bit immersion breaking. I haven't seen any problems with the english and the writing has a good flow. I hope that we get more development on Katsys and that not every character turns out to be concealing a web of dark secrets.

            All in all, it's a very interesting novel and I await the next chapter -and the eventual light novel and anime, of course.

                Nathair_Insint
                Thanks for thinking that it's worthy to be a light novel or anime, but unless someone translates it into Japanese, that is highly unlikely. I'm writing this just for fun and for my love of isekai anime.
                About the 2 bits that you found strange...the first volume is written such that it is in the viewpoint of the MC. He is naive. He is inexperienced. He is ever trusting of the somewhat stereotypical FL that he is with. If the beginning of volume 2 seems out of the blue, it was on purpose. It's supposed to make you think, 'she deceived you (both the MC and the reader) the entire time.'
                Please don't flame me if I put some of the characters through some dark times...lol

                    Synopsis:

                    Levit is a high-school student with the power to control any machine. But when he narrowly avoids a mass genocide at his school, he is thrown into the supermax prison Hold 5. Hating the world for his plight, Levit has resolved to tear it down and remake it, starting with his country, and then their enemy: Hinsa.

                    Mech action, romance and suspense guaranteed!

                    Link:
                    https://www.webnovel.com/book/15576698406056205

                      Name: A Devil's Sins
                      Hoping for some new reviews if anyone's willing. Hopefully some honest opinions will help me make my storytelling better.

                      Genre: Dark Fantasy, Action-Adventure
                      Synopsis: A Devils Sins tells the story of a young nobles daughter who, like all within the walled capital city, has never stepped foot outside the capital.Follow the journey of a noble's daughter, Aisellia Rae, as she is selected on behalf of her family to participate in a charity relief effort led by The Temple administration in its first expedition outside the walls. What starts as a young woman's adventures with high hopes to finally see the world quickly turns to an evening of tragedy,leading to her first encounter with a Devil.

                      Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/15444394506543105/A-Devil's-Sins

                        okay, welp..here I go. So this is my book: To love the Heartless (re-write) make sure that you're reading the re-write. Because my original had a slightly mess plot line..so yeah. I'm working on promoting the novel right now and then after spreading the word about it's exsistance, I'll go back to working on it. Even though the book say romance i'd have to say that it's like..80% adventure with a little bit of a flirtatious comedy. But cutting close to the end of the book it will be more on the romance side so if romance isn't for you I wouldn't read it.

                        Synopsis: Lucyndth doesn't know who he is or where he's from. He might as well be a child if you count the fact that he has trouble speaking. Washing up ashore doesn't really help his case either. This novel is about Lucyndth, seventeen, who meets a demon that promises to help him re-cover his memories for a price far greater than any sum of money. After spending some time together they both start to realise that they aren't who they say they are. The demon, Xinyung, feeling that he might've met this stranger before after seeing the mysterious tattoo on Lucyndth's arm. Will they grow together over time or will they lose trust in each other after learning each others secrets? Read to find out.

                        also..is that synopsis too dramatic?😅

                          A princess, an alcoholic vampire, and a honey badger walked into a bar… Well actually, it was more of walking out of a bar. Let’s start from the beginning.

                          Once upon a time, there was a knight in not so shining armor who harmed more damsels than he saved, a kidnapped princess being held for ransom, a depressed unicorn searching for love, an alcoholic vampire with just a slight drinking problem, and a honey badger who was a bit of a party animal living in a world of fantasy. They must come together to battle vegan goblins, thwart the plans of trolls (that only speak Deutsch), listen to a group of passive aggressive gnomes, and save a group of really baked tree elves in order to bring the princess home.
                          https://www.webnovel.com/book/15616117405219405/Happily-Ever-After%3A-The-Nonsensical-Story-of-How-Llamas-Were-Made

                            Title: HAKUNA FERMATA!
                            Genre: Sports/ Realistic Fiction

                            Synopsis:
                            A shy middle-school boy joins a high-school Marching Band, hoping to one day become equals with the most confident girl in the program, along with gaining the skills necessary to push their band to the international stage and make friends along the way.
                            https://www.webnovel.com/book/15658138605554205

                              DragonlordX I'll try and review as many in this thread as possible.

                              My novel will ALWAYS be 100% free, no stones, coins, passes, souls, gremlins, or whatever they make their currency needed!

                              The Alterra Project (3rd volume nearing completion, new cover coming soon!)

                              https://www.webnovel.com/book/14243270606809705/41870331941538614

                              Synopsis: A hundred years from now the Earth is now reduced to several domed cities after the last war raised the temperature across the planet thus raising the sea level.

                              The most common escape for everyone is virtual reality. A new game, Alterra Online, is set to release and promises to be the most realistic mecha/military/political simulation to date as well as the first full dive virtual reality game.

                              Gray Wilhelm, like so many others, wants to be one of the first to play. What is Alterra Online's secret? Why do players feel more alive in the game than in real life? And why is the government and Alterra Corporation working on it together?

                              Features:
                              - NO Systems, Reincarnations, Supernatural Powers, harems, or brain dead females that chase after MC.
                              - Monty Python references and many others.
                              - Believable characters

                                  Title: My Fantasy World
                                  Genre: Fantasy

                                  Synopsis:
                                  Ever read reincarnation stories? Where the protagonist has some kind of cheat, a System or Chip?

                                  Naomi loves this kind of story, so when she dies and wakes up in the presence of some man, she immediately remembers the cliché an assumes that he is a good. So, she instantly lists what she wants as her cheat.
                                  Naomi already knows what she wants because she philosophized about it whenever she read a story about reincarnation.

                                  Therefore, when she gets reincarcerated in a fantasy world she tries her best to imitate the protagonists of the stories she loved so much in her last live (and fight her laziness).

                                  https://www.webnovel.com/book/12984494205253805

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