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LinShui
Lemme explain. The problem with this thread —for me — is that the feedback is vague, to say the least — I myself do my reviews which stay on peoples timeline in a way that is meant to attract readers. Then there are places like Scribiophile or whatever and others. r/destructivereaders being my favourite. Those give detailed and helpful feedback, however, they only go for 1 chapter at a time. Which is good for Novels that I try to write, but in the instance of a Web-Novel? Not so much.

What I am seeking out/offering is as follows. You might not be sure if something fits your story, but you have no one to go over the chapter or talk about the idea. When this happens, you can come to me and ask for my feedback. In turn I'll ask for something of equal value — This'll be in most cases simply going over a chapter of my story.

You help me, I'll help you :)

Blackcrust

The major one right now is the way you simply write things. I feel a lot of authors hand appearing in your writing.

Dialogue is long/tedious and you use it to infodump. Also, you sometimes go too far in explaining things.
For example. A piece from your story.
since there are mo initials, we can't be tracked when we sell it in the black market.
You just delete this. This is all you going and explaining something unnecessary.
Vezku_Biceps#7984 <———— My discord. This isn't the place to talk too long about these — Huebot will soon be on my ass.

f1n
That sounds fine to me. :)
But for now, I will read through the three chapters you have up and jot down some notes. I will ping you within 24hours. I will go through in detail what I find and in exchange, could you read my story (how many chapters is not so important, but if you could read through at least 3 would be nice) and leave me a review? Honest one is fine. :)
Most importantly, where you want me to leave my critique of your writing? Here, or somewhere else?