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Petty behaviour, entitled people, and a rude awakening at the end. These three events usually resulted in a satisfying set of events. This was Nima's everyday life.

But, she soon got tired of this farce, changing her way of life. She said anything that spilled out her mouth, uncaring of the disrespect she caused, the criticism she induced, and the atrocities she created. Despite her character full of hypocrisy, she wished to make the world an honest place.

A book of serial one-shots set in real-life, featuring Nima's experiences in the modern world. Read as this sarcastic girl gets worked up over everything, sometimes using her wits and common sense to deal with people, other times just internally swearing at them.

Okay, I just edited whatever you presented. Honestly speaking, on a scale of 1 to 100 (with the scale being my willingness to continue reading the story), I will give this a 54. I will read it but, it would depend on my mood. The synopsis introduces the MC, her characteristic traits, and her personality, which is well and good. But, you also need to introduce the banking point of the story, like a crisis, conflict, theme, etc. Just a slice of life theme wouldn't interest anyone; so, make note of it.

With the aspects fo the Title, I must say you did a good job. But, when it comes to WN readers, I don't know if they can understand the type of story you present without googling the meaning of the title (I did it too).

The girl in the cover is well defined. She correlates to the title and the synopsis. But, considering the cover as a whole, I wouldn't say it passes. There are three halos around the lady (I think they represent her psyche or something but I am not sure) which is off-putting. They prevent my gaze from being drawn to the cover. Having a single halo to create contrast is more than enough. Coming to the contrast, the lady and the background don't sync well with one another. Moreover, you have your author name pasted all over it like a watermark which is confusing. It makes one don't want to look at it.

Suggestion: Retain the lady (Keep a halo if you need). Change the background to a market place, a shopping mall, or the side of the road. Keep it anything included in the story, to elevate the theme of the story. Remove the spam author name and add a single beautiful one like the other books. Just do these points and it will improve them by a whole level.

    Overlord_Venus Thank you for this input. I'll try to work on that.
    For the synopsis I will definitely have to edit in some details. Since the story hasn't progressed too far I didn't edit in any plot details (I plan to do it based on how far the story has gone), but the changes/additions you made do seem very good to add in for now and the one's you've recommended I will definitely consider.
    Thanks for your honest review. And for doing this kind of event. I can't even count how many people have tried to ask me for feedback in exchange for feedback and they only replied with "I read your synopsis it has quite some potential" which is not a very helpful feedback at all, since I'm hoping they'll tell me on how they felt reading it or if they even felt like reading the actual story. So thanks for giving meaningful input.

        Overlord_Venus

        WAR GROUNDS

        Players feared no death because they had infinite lives. But what if the game was a real world in another dimension? And what if the monsters and NPCs broke loose and invaded your home? Would you still face them with the same bravery, knowing that death would now be certain?

        Aildrin Gentrix only wanted the truth about his parents’ death. But with the truth came the burden to save the world.

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        Thank you, senpai. Bless your kind!

            Overlord_Venus

            Isekai Institute

            The Isekai Institute took charge of regulating the Sojourners—a group of professional explorers sent on missions to other dimensions.

            But one day, Samwise Stein—a pioneer—never returned. Countless expeditions searched for him, but all they had brought back was an incomplete copy of his journal. It contained a record of his day-to-day adventures and descriptions of a fabled world called The Paradise.

            Ten years later, Samuel finally reached the legal age and set it upon himself to find the missing man—his father. But first, he must survive the Institute’s deadly trials and become a Sojourner.

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                Everyone probably dreams of being transmigrated into a sword and magic world, right? But not Kite. He was transmigrated without any warning at all. Worst of all the body he currently possesses is in the danger of dying. At least he had a system to level up and grew strong, at least that was what he thought. Until he realizes that all the people here have their own level-up system. He then tried to access the memory of the past owner when he received a message from the system.

                | Host is detected searching memory fragments.
                Random memory will be obtained by sacrificing any amount of Experience Points. |

                He was completely hopeless. Just checking his own memory cost a number of experience points. He was literally transmigrated into an unknown game-like world. And his level was also low, at Level 2.

                Join Kite as he experiences many troubles, tragedies, sufferings, and tribulations and embark on the path of being the strongest. The Legend of the All-Mighty God of Infinity has begun.
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                  SilentMild

                  Death was never a cause for concern because players had infinite lives. But, what if the game was a real-world, set in another dimension? And, what if the monsters and NPCs break loose and invade your home? Would you still face them with the same bravery as before, knowing that death would now be certain?

                  Aildrin Gentrix only sought the truth about his parents’ death. But with the truth came the burden to save the world.

                  The first paragraph in the synopsis gave the underlying world background, giving your readers the idea of what they can expect. You have done a well enough job here. But, in the second paragraph doesn't say much, other than give a vague impression of the first paragraph.

                  The MC is introduced, well and good. His motive is also introduced, again a sound job. But, the final line doesn't make any sense. Accompanying his parent's death was a burden forcing him to save the world. This final line doesn't make any sense, like it doesn't captivate me. I suggest you use a different one-liner to create a better oomph effect. Fill in with some world BG to relate with the truth of his parent's death or something along the line. Sorry, I don't have a better opinion on this point.

                  For the cover, you can't find a better background image. This is simply perfect. As for the title, make it big, big to the extent, each word occupies a line. You used a comic shade of crimson for the font to match with the vibe. But, even though it matches with the cover, it doesn't generate enough contract to make it visible. So, create a border around the font (with a shade of white) so that it makes the title more appealing. Also, used a glow effect around them. But, for the colour choice, choose a light colour that contracts with the dark background

                  For the author name, you don't need to add 'by' since it is apparent that it is the name of the author. Change its style so that it is not similar to the title. let it stay small, like between one-fourth to one-third the size of the title will be the best

                      Overlord_Venus

                      "I will be the first to recognise you,"
                      "The first to love you,"
                      "The first to make commitments. I will recognise you from the ashes," He whispered into her ears but will he keep these words?
                      ............

                      Stephanie Woods, a lovely looking and beautiful lady, was once called heinous, a monster, the devil’s bride as a child because of the big burnt scar on her face.

                      As a child Stephanie went through hell in hands of the neighbourhood children, her sister, mother, fellow students and even from the so-called adults. A miracle came to her the day she wanted to commit suicide.

                      She met him like the miracle that happened to her 11 years ago. He promised to marry the heinous her even though no guy married her. She has been looking for him for the past seventeen years because she thought they were fated to be together. What will happen when they meet seventeen years later as a total stranger?
                      Adams Vincent, a friendly looking CEO, has a vehement dislike for beautiful women because of the incident he witnesses seventeen years ago. A girl being bullied and called horrible names because she had a scar on her face. Although he was friendly, people tend to run away from him when he is angry. He meets her again seventeen years later. But he did not recognise her like he had promised. He treats her indifferently not knowing that she is the one he has been searching for all his life.

                      Have you ever seen a guy who hates a lady because she is beautiful? Stay with me and read what will happen when he eventually learns that the lady he has been mean to was the same girl he has been searching for.
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