deepu_ I skimmed though it and saw that you still have some grammar mistakes and some of the way you word things are a bit confusing that I had to reread through it a few times.
After putting it in grammarly, put it through word or google docs, then read your story out loud(or in your head), you would be able to hear the mistakes and fix it. I know it seems tedious, but it does help.

    Scarletheart84 thanks scarlett. I'm gonna check yours tomorrow. Need some sleep first since Its already midnight in the middle east. Hehe.

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