BlaccLotus

                                                    I did it... I sort of stopped reading to do something, but I just finished it first thing in the morning OvO. It's really good, other than the plot, which might just be me being weird and picky with a romance novel, and Aveline, who I think should have some effect from the fact that her dad is dead and her mom is realllllllly busy. The descriptions were nice and I liked the interpersonal (is that the word???) connections between the families and businesses.

                                                        Purpl3_Noodle

                                                        Yours was pretty long so it took me some time (Like... three hours, idk if that's fast or slow, some of the chapters were shorter some longer so idkkkkk) to finish it. I'd say there was the quotation thing, which stopped only just recently, and (it's personal) I just found the plot kind of... throws stuff at readers without any hints so that the reader can't really get anything out. I mean, I can assess somethings, but not a lot. Which works. Also, the characters were kind of... agree or get killed or hurt or punched or humiliated. Even when it took a while, it would be like I WILL GET REVENGE EVENTUALLY. I mean, it might just be me and my pickiness, but it does strike me as weird for the MC to just be... so... violent. If he can't beat them, he'll prank them or go back get stronger and THEN beat them... Other than that, I really liked the detail that went into it... There was one guy who said that it was similar to other stories, but seriously? Everything is built off of something... at least partially? I think...

                                                            Johnsonlong696969

                                                            Okay, it's reallllllly good and I really like how everything sort of clicks into place, it's just everyone sounds too lucid, like they're drunk or something (it might just be me) (tbh, I only thought that was possible in one-shots because they're one shots... they're not long enough for the metaphors to get annoying). I would also be careful not to make everything click (poeticness thing) too much or else it'll get a bit weird to read, like when there are too many metaphors in one paragraph... Other than that, I really liked it OvO

                                                                David_Neilsen

                                                                kk so I did it (also is that a cat???) and the only thing I would mention and it might be me (actually it probably is me), it's just that... fourteen year olds don't have that much sarcasm... and recently teachers don't call people by their last names, at least in Canada. It's just sort of awkward for me to read it especially when all my classmates are obsessed about grades.
                                                                Other than that, it's really cool and miss bubbles

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