After reading the first few chapters I'd like to give my honest opinion to you and I have not given it an official review because I wanted to help you, being a fellow writer and didn't want to give you a 5 star just for the sake of it.
The story is very hard to read. I couldn't make of what is happening and I had to read again. There is no space between sentences, the dialogues are not under quotes and there are many grammatical errors. I do not intent to discourage you, but I suppose these are some things that are the basics of writing a story. Make sure your sentences are spaced. I'd recommend downloading an app called 'Grammarly' on your phone if you use your phone to write it or it's available on Google as well.
It will help you with sentence alignment. The sentences are very crowded and packed. To be very honest, I had trouble reading it. Many readers will get displeased by this and give up on your book, however promising your storyline might be!
I hope you take this as it is meant to be— constructive criticism from a fellow writer. If you want me to give a 5 star to you anyway, just let me know and I will.
Hope this helps you.
