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    Are you native English speaker? Any experience you can share about the respective field to consider the offer.

      Pleasure to tell you that I have been working as a story writer with different top agencies for a long time. I'll overview your novel and share my honest opinion. And also rate it.

      Being a native English speaker kindly have a look at my novel and check out if you find any grammatical mistakes or share any idea about the story concept.

      Best of luck.

        17 days later

        US_DreamerDon Sure, I'll start from today. And please try to comment on each paragraph whatever you feel so I can know the direction of my story.

            US_DreamerDon

            Hi US_DreamerDon,

            I have finished the 1st chapter's detailed review.

            What did I feel about this chapter?

            → Funny background & dialogues
            → Have a big turn in the chapter that really shocked me (the point when Elliot body changed)

            How to make it more interesting?

            → Give more details about characters so readers can have emotional linkage with the characters
            → If possible, write the chapter summary at the end or the start of the next chapter.

            The positive points about the chapter:
            → Have a big turn even in the first chapter
            → No character mixing, clear dialogues, and well-written content

            Negative point:
            Less detail about each character (If you determine to show it in 2nd or 3rd chapter, it's totally fine).

            Hope so it'll help.

            Can't wait to see yours on mine.

            Thanks

                US_DreamerDon

                2nd chapter review is done.

                What did I feel about this chapter?
                → Usual mother reaction. Readers can relate it to their daily life.
                → Story pace really impressed me. You covered many things at a decent pace.

                How do you make it more interesting?

                → Try to show Elliot's expressions in a way that readers will feel something for him. You did well in explaining what was happening but explain a little bit what he feels, what he wants, e.t.c.

                Positive points:

                → Too engaging to compare with our lives

                Negative points:

                Lack of the factors that cause the emotional attachment of character with readers. My long experience in story writing says that it's a big point. If you're successful in doing this, readers will be compelled to tread whole chapters.

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