Akira_Monadelle I read your book from Chapter 1 to 2, I liked how it started and how you are developing the character even the minor characters. The advice you left at the end about Chapter 2 is important so as to warn minors if there are any. I read little of Chapter 3 and when I saw "I hated my job", I was wondering what you wrote in Chapter 1 about the MC having no job. Then I noticed "Five years later". Cloey told her of a job opportunity as a Business Analyst. This is where I was able to read to. I do not have the time to read your book but I will surely make time as this is one of the best romance books ever. Novels are made from sentences. To make sentences, you use words and you used the correct choice of words to make the plot. I believe there are three things that make a novel; Plot, Theme and Background.
So I shall review your novel by these three:
Plot - 7/10
Theme - 8/10
Background - 8/10

The plot was amazing but how does someone have sex with someone so early in a novel. It is like meeting a girl for the first time and asking her to be your girlfriend. She might reject or say you two will have to get to know each other better.
The theme for me is the words. You used the correct choice of words but made some mistakes with the punctuation known as comma.
The background is the environment where the theme is displayed. You made sure that they were seen having sex. You made sure that she had a job as an ice cream woman which was described as the worst job ever. You gave her the opportunity of working as a Business Analyst. I will surely continue reading to find out what happened.

Final review - 23/30

      Scientist_113 Thanks for the honest review, much appreciated. :) I'm working on the mistakes with the commas, they are mostly in the earlier chapters since during that time I was still improving my writing ability and they were written years before I decided to continue the novel.

      As you read on you will see the relevance of the sex so early in the novel. You are not the first to be curious about it lol. But as those persons read on they understood and I'm sure you will too.

      Thanks again 😊

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