f0011 As requested, I've checked your work and left a few words 🙂

EDIT: it says review limit reached, so I'll post it here.

Considering English isn't your first language, you've gotten a good grasp on it so far. There's room for improvement in terms of grammar (Grammarly's got lots of articles on common writing mistakes and how to avoid them), especially where the comma splices, tense consistency and punctuation use is concerned, but it's nothing that a good proofread and rewrite can't fix. Keep at it.

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