@Sneakycat098
It was Lara first 3 or 4 chapters, then you switched to Luna (the body she transmigrated to). Was it because she got her memory back or another sort of significant transition or was it something that you missed while editing?
That said. The story is really good. as a fellow speaker of English as a second language I live your same struggles with grammar, the flow of your novel would flow a thousand times better if you picked a tense and kept using it. Past tense then go with :went liked lived etc... it strikes the wrong chord when you go with: went, like, living etc... man I hope I'm making sense by now.
All that aside, I really like the story and it's in my library. It's a 5 star novel for me.

    ZeroX0666 yeah I put in my library and leave a review later thanks.

        MerrySweet yes, she did gained the host's memory and I think I did mentioned it in the last para of first chapter. Regarding the tense, I really appreciate that for telling me, I'll work on it. Thank you so much for reading my novel and reviewing it. I am glad you liked it

          Dinessu didn't forget yours, I'll be reading it tomorrow, let's read the first 5 chapters, ok?

              Dinessu well I can't add your book to a collection so I will just read it like that

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