Demons_and_I Idk if I told you this but I left you a review and everything I don't know if you saw it. I recommend making the first chapter a prologue since it's a huge exposition dump. Jump into the story first leave the exposition there available for if readers want to know the backdrop of the story, this will help with your overall pacing and engagement of the reader. Just my advice anyways here's my novel https://www.webnovel.com/book/a-brother's-strength_24947605205370305

      McWms99 But I already have a prologue. I can't really dump info into the prologue. The prologue is a story on Ashur's life, and is connected to the story, but it doesn't have any relevance to present chapters. The first chapter has a lot of info, but I don't think it affected the quality. But I'll see what I can do. I also did some editing just recently, so you can go check it out and tell me what you think of the edited version. Please 🥺. I'm going to review yours right now.

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            Demons_and_I I was mistaken about the prologue bit my bad, though I made comments concerning the exposition of the actually first chapter

                Demons_and_I I gave you another review, I know it may take some time, but I strongly suggest breaking up those first 5 chapters and getting rid of the character exposition. The world exposition is fine if you feel like you really need it to be there. Other than that, i don't want exposition explaining Cain's relationships with any character. Not even his family. Which is why I suggest bolstering the number of chapters, I know you wanna get to action and make it snazzy but I'm telling you it will make your story better if you slow down just a little bit

                    McWms99 I'll try my best. I'm trying to figure out a way to break the chapters up to make them shorter without removing any content. Do you have any ideas as to how I can go about this?

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