lala_sanara I had some free time, so I ended up reading your novel anyway. It was good. The plot, the pacing, good. The grammar though could be better. And you left out important details like where what scene was taking place.
but that being said, the plot was good and you'd probably be fine with an edit. I wish you good luck.
here's mine btw,
https://www.webnovel.com/book/conquering-space-with-my-licking-system_22618834705445405/prologue_60716995255007285

      Nr_Yet1208 Oh thank you for the advice and review, it will surely help me a lot in editing my work. I will review yours now as well.

        Hey everyone, this is my first released novel. It has 6 chapters so far with about 2 chapters becoming available a week. If you read please leave a review and some constructive criticism if you can. Give me time to actually read your stories and I will also leave a review and some tips. Thank you!

        Link: King Fool NEW CHAPTER

        Fixated on stories of magic since a young child, King Lonson VI of Oates sets out on an expedition to find it. But....his undying obsession may lead to his death along with the downfall the Oates Kingdom.
        "...But magic must exist! How else can we explain the unexplainable?"

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          Saher_Abidi Done. Good plot but you should focus a bit more on style and grammar. You have way too many continuous sentences going. It could be a preference but to me that kind of ruined the fun of reading. I wish you good luck in editing.

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              A very interesting storyyy Read it guys!!

              Synopsis
              From time immemorial, angels are considered a more perfect beings than human, they are not influenced by the rationality that humans possess. In fact, they think more intellectually in every decision, making them incapable of making sins. One day, in an unknown reason, something cause a change in the heart of some angels that led to one of the biggest chaos in heavenly realm. After the great turmoil, the angels that cause mayhem were thrown down in the mortal land. After many years, these fallen angels build their own kingdoms, building and searching for more power again for the second war. What will be their destiny in the mortal world? What another pandemonium would they bring to this land?

                I consider myself to be a man of principle. But, what man does not? Even the cutthroat, I have noticed, considers his actions "moral" after a fashion.
                Perhaps another person, reading of my life, would name me a religious tyrant. He could call me arrogant. What is to make that man's opinion any less valid than my own?

                I guess it all comes down to one fact :
                In the end, I'm the one with the armies.

                It's an empire ruled by an immortal God, where volcanic ash fall from the sky and most of the population are slaves. A thousand year ago, the lord czar was the chosen one or more like Hero of ages from a prophecy and saved the world from a horrible fate! Or so the tale goes.

                And clearly, something went wrong, since now the world is basically ruled by a Dark Lord. Where are our real heroes? Who will be our new "hope of light?" Will the half breeds dare to try?

                Join us in the journey to overturn the inevitable!

                [ THE HALF-BREEDS]

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                  I've been on hiatus for a year but I'm continuing where I left off in my novel! Any reads would be super appreciated <3

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                  In the blink of an eye, Ezra Nyx’s life changes forever. As an ordinary college student, he hasn’t thought much of his future, but one night, he experiences something life-changing. He now knows something that no one else does, humanity is not alone. Unknown forces are finding their way to Earth and making it their little playground. Follow Ezra’s journey as he navigates through all the chaos and becomes more than he ever thought he could be.

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