Averanges
I finished reviewing your novel.
It's a really fun read!
Just a tip, please put the spoken dialogues in double quotation marks (",") instead of thoughts.
On the other hand, you can use the (-) that you are currently using for dialogues for thoughts.
You can also try using single quotation marks (',')
It is really distracting to read words within double quotes and realise that they are thoughts and not spoken dialogue.
Other than that it's great!
btw are you planning on making it a harem or non-harem??
Thanks for the review on mine.