Ba_nks I'm done with yours..
Nice plot, you have a unique romance story... The only thing that I wanted to point out is the long paragraphs and sometimes you mixed two people talking in them and got me confused as to whom was speaking.. Your paragraphs could be reduced a bit, it helps the reader to keep up and avoid confusion.... Just my opinion

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      Dara Manuel, please drop the name of your story.

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        Please read and review my work.

        Synopsis

        [WARNING: MATURE CONTENT]

        From birth to him being seven years old, Osmond ward knew only about his village. He thought that the world was beautiful and one day he will venture into the unknown and see it for himself.

        It all changed on that day.

        Orcs and goblins and ogres flowed. They plundered, raped and feasted.

        On that day he witnessed nightmares in life.

        Orphaned and powerless, he was saved by a stranger. A man to whom he was forced upon.

        What will Osmond ward seek now?.

        Author's note:

        I am a non native English speaker.

        This is my first work. I wanted a story with non op characters and real stakes.

        I support all forms of constructive criticism and i hope you will enjoy my work.

        Link below.

        https://www.webnovel.com/book/graeae-%0D-land-of-beauty-and-nightmares_23880683806254305?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4320157483

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