Rosy_786 u haven't tag me well and so couldn't find ur msg early.... But l've read it and really liked the concept... But plzz do make ur paragraph a bit small and try to remove some unnecessary scence..... Instead of that everything is nice and interesting..
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      _Rockbison_ hi! I just reviewed your novel and it's really good. I've mentioned everything detail I wanted to point out to make your novel better. I hope you'll work on them. Bye and thanks for honestly reviewing mine.

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          Kyrell hi! I just took a short peek at your novel and there are two things I would like to point out.
          1) improve your synopsis. It isn't really bad, but I think it's still lacking in lot ways. Add some more depth to it, like what the story actually revolves around. It almost seemed like a starting scene to me. Just giving my povs.
          2) your whole novel is written in one complete para. Break it into parts and give your story a structure. Spacing helps readers to take a break and they don't tend to get lost between lines.
          I hope you won't take my above suggestions as rude. I simply wanted to help a young aspiring writer.

              Warning!! This novel requires special attention; if you want to get the essence of the story, you should read up to chapter 9..... but don't worry, you won't be disappointed...

              Lahrin _I Will Never Lose Her Again - The King of Gods

              Lahrin is the story of two young teenagers who set out on a journey and became unexpectedly involved with a demon-like creature.
              Following a series of events, they began talking about intriguing themes like Gods and Demons. While talking about this, the demon-like figure casually mentions that he has an idea about who gave their forefathers the forbidden fruit.

              That's when the young teenagers realize this demon isn't just any ordinary demon, but rather a god-class entity.
              But, in reality, the demon was scared of these humans.

              Why is a demon's power rival god afraid of two human teenagers?
              What exactly is this demon?
              Who gave our forefathers the forbidden fruit?
              What happened in the origin of the human race?

              Let's find out the answers to these questions along the journey...

              Instead of seeing the story from one point of view, this series will allow the reader to hear the story from each character's point of view, allowing the reader to experience the story in 360-degrees. After all, our entire lives are merely a tale for someone sitting above us.
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                Sneakycat098 1) I tried improving it a lot of times, and that was the best I could do so far, but I'll try to think of another way to convey the sonopsis as you said!
                2) Hmm... The are some paras that are long and some that are pretty short, it depends on the content. At first, I wrote very short paras, but I the thing got reeeeally long and dragging, then I started mixing them, short and long, but I will take into account the spacing and re-read the whole thing so readers don't get lost o tired!

                Don't sweat it! I'm happy to receive constructive suggestions! If not, I wouldn't have come here hehe I hope you like it!! ♥

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