Requesting a review as well
Book Name: Men Vs Apocalypse
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/10642981005087705/Men-vs-Apocalypse
Language is not my best forte but I have many stuff in my brain which I like to express. I look forward to a brutally honest review. Thank you in advance.
Knihw_ I would recommend doing some dashes or an extra enter, if you can, to help split up the synopses and your comments as the author. I would also recommend reading your story out loud to try and catch some of your grammar errors. Such as using glory where I think you mean glorious.
You also have several cases of redundancy throughout your story. An example is “stood straight and upright”. You are very repetitive in your story I can count at least 3 times where you have repeated yourself in the first 4 paragraphs. To me this example of redundancy is okay: “As time passed, the black mist only became more thicker”. But I also know if it was my writing, my mom would read it and suggest removing the more, and I would do it because it sounds a bit smoother. Reviewing comma usage and checking the tense of you writing other ways to help you improve. Keep writing! :)
creativewritting Uh... I wonder if you only read the first chapter? As for 'glory', you mean 'gory'? You pointing out these errors does help but in my opinion, the first chapter is something i did in a rushed manner. I personally think I got better after it.
Still, thanks for the review.
Qingwa I like your synopsis. The only thing I found wrong was some missing commas. I think your story sounds pretty interesting. :)
EscLate You have a tendency to have an extra space before your periods and commas or be missing the after them. You also have some missing words like On a very NORMAL and The only thing left. If you can I would recommend reading your story out loud to catch some of your dropped words and find the mistakes like using we instead of was. Keep writing. :)
Knihw_ Yeah. We don't have the time to read more than the first chapter. So if you want us to read more your going to have to tell us, unless the person thinks it's really short. As for glory vs gory, I might be too tired well I'm doing reviews at the moment, sorry.
creativewritting ah. Thanks. Will have a thorough clean up when I get time.
I was planning to drop it but well, some people are reading it. Will complete it however possible. Thanks for your honest review.
Thanks for your effort. I would try to improve my writing. If you could please read a couple of chapters more.
Thanks for your effort. I would try to improve my writing. If you could please read a couple of chapters more.
Hello, I am requesting a review of my story.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/10692925705135505/Cleaning-Up-The-Future
It is a science fiction novel. I think that it starts off with readers wondering what's going on, but as you continue reading you realize what's up. I think traveling this new future with the protagonist there to give their honest reaction is interesting for readers, but I'm the author so I am very biased. Of course, I know more about these characters so I cherish them and the story. Even when a character keeps being weird and mysterious.
I update 3 chapters a week, and sometimes I give an extra chapter.
Thanks in advance. No rush. I appreciate ya'll taking a look.
I am one of few probably that can't use Discord, so I set up a website to help connect original authors to editors, Please take a look: https://forum.webnovel.com/d/8301-original-authors-and-editors/
DeJeL 23DN4L That one was shut down: Updated Forum Link.;,;.
Link to the novel
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11041779705245505
The genre of the novel
Magical Realism and Science Fiction....
What do you think about it as an author
Nothing to say..coz everybody is author.
How common are the updates
2 chapter every week
Poche Hi nazell, I hope you don't mind me stating my opinions about your book :smiley:. BTW... I like the book cover :thumbup:
ISSUES
- Doesn't give much impact.
- "Can Drusus Zephyro satisfy his obsession? Can the four species live in harmony?" This was supposed to be a good ending for your synopsis, it's an honest opinion of mine. But it lost it's baiting effect :cry: . I know it's probably hard to write a synopsis (every writer's problem), but always remember, just like buying a book in the bookstore, some/most readers would read the synopsis to check whether it is worth wasting your time and money. That's why, you have to pour all your effort to make sure your synopsis sounds interesting. Create the best baiting effect for your book.
- Rewrite your synopsis and make it interesting.
ISSUES:
- Sentence Construction
- The use of commas.
- Misuse of Tenses
- Lifeless and a bit awkward character dialogues
- Lacks descriptive sentences
- Not really interesting
DO YOU LIKE THE NOVEL?
- Can't properly judge since it's still in Chapter One.
IS IT WORTH A READ? WILL YOU PUT IT IN YOUR LIBRARY?
- I don't want to hurt your feelings, but as a reviewer I want to honestly state my opinion. It sounds interesting, but it only sounds interesting because I could see potential within it. But if you ask me if I will put in my library... I will still wait till the author fixes the issues within his or her book.
Poche Hi nazell, I hope you don't mind me stating my opinions about your book :smiley:. BTW... I like the book cover :thumbup:
ISSUES
- Doesn't give much impact.
- "Can Drusus Zephyro satisfy his obsession? Can the four species live in harmony?" This was supposed to be a good ending for your synopsis, it's an honest opinion of mine. But it lost it's baiting effect :cry: . I know it's probably hard to write a synopsis (every writer's problem), but always remember, just like buying a book in the bookstore, some/most readers would read the synopsis to check whether it is worth wasting your time and money. That's why, you have to pour all your effort to make sure your synopsis sounds interesting. Create the best baiting effect for your book.
- Rewrite your synopsis and make it interesting.
ISSUES:
- Sentence Construction
- The use of commas.
- Misuse of Tenses
- Lifeless and a bit awkward character dialogues
- Lacks descriptive sentences
- Not really interesting
DO YOU LIKE THE NOVEL?
- Can't properly judge since it's still in Chapter One.
IS IT WORTH A READ? WILL YOU PUT IT IN YOUR LIBRARY?
- I don't want to hurt your feelings, but as a reviewer I want to honestly state my opinion. It sounds interesting, but it only sounds interesting because I could see potential within it. But if you ask me if I will put in my library... I will still wait till the author fixes the issues within his or her book.
P.S. I hope you aren't disheartened, offended, or angry about this review.
- YNNIE234
Poche Oh! okay... I understand now.. you can always ask for an editor to help you, just simply fill in this form in order for you to get a chance to have your own personal editor or reviewer :) https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScOPkZ4PYz6N6SsZxwgsH0c00I61gVa6MRfkwpyN7SeMJWj9Q/viewform?usp=pp_url
KingBiBiK Hi there kibibik!
ISSUES
- Sounds more like a prologue than a synopsis. You need to revise it later on.
ISSUES
- Misspelled words
- There are some grammar errors.
- Punctuation in some sentences
etc.
Use this form: https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScOPkZ4PYz6N6SsZxwgsH0c00I61gVa6MRfkwpyN7SeMJWj9Q/viewform?usp=pp_url to get a much more defined review for your book. It would be better if you had a discord, for a much more faster reply.
