Qingwa I like your synopsis. The only thing I found wrong was some missing commas. I think your story sounds pretty interesting. :)
Originals Author Society [Rating |Editing |Support]
EscLate You have a tendency to have an extra space before your periods and commas or be missing the after them. You also have some missing words like On a very NORMAL and The only thing left. If you can I would recommend reading your story out loud to catch some of your dropped words and find the mistakes like using we instead of was. Keep writing. :)
- Edited
Knihw_ Yeah. We don't have the time to read more than the first chapter. So if you want us to read more your going to have to tell us, unless the person thinks it's really short. As for glory vs gory, I might be too tired well I'm doing reviews at the moment, sorry.
creativewritting ah. Thanks. Will have a thorough clean up when I get time.
I was planning to drop it but well, some people are reading it. Will complete it however possible. Thanks for your honest review.
Thanks for your effort. I would try to improve my writing. If you could please read a couple of chapters more.
Thanks for your effort. I would try to improve my writing. If you could please read a couple of chapters more.
9 days later
Hello, I am requesting a review of my story.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/10692925705135505/Cleaning-Up-The-Future
It is a science fiction novel. I think that it starts off with readers wondering what's going on, but as you continue reading you realize what's up. I think traveling this new future with the protagonist there to give their honest reaction is interesting for readers, but I'm the author so I am very biased. Of course, I know more about these characters so I cherish them and the story. Even when a character keeps being weird and mysterious.
I update 3 chapters a week, and sometimes I give an extra chapter.
Thanks in advance. No rush. I appreciate ya'll taking a look.
I am one of few probably that can't use Discord, so I set up a website to help connect original authors to editors, Please take a look: https://forum.webnovel.com/d/8301-original-authors-and-editors/
DeJeL 23DN4L That one was shut down: Updated Forum Link.;,;.
Link to the novel
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11041779705245505
The genre of the novel
Magical Realism and Science Fiction....
What do you think about it as an author
Nothing to say..coz everybody is author.
How common are the updates
2 chapter every week
Poche Hi nazell, I hope you don't mind me stating my opinions about your book :smiley:. BTW... I like the book cover :thumbup:
SYNOPSIS
ISSUES
- Doesn't give much impact.
- "Can Drusus Zephyro satisfy his obsession? Can the four species live in harmony?" This was supposed to be a good ending for your synopsis, it's an honest opinion of mine. But it lost it's baiting effect :cry: . I know it's probably hard to write a synopsis (every writer's problem), but always remember, just like buying a book in the bookstore, some/most readers would read the synopsis to check whether it is worth wasting your time and money. That's why, you have to pour all your effort to make sure your synopsis sounds interesting. Create the best baiting effect for your book.
- Rewrite your synopsis and make it interesting.
CHAPTER ONE
ISSUES:
- Sentence Construction
- The use of commas.
- Misuse of Tenses
- Lifeless and a bit awkward character dialogues
- Lacks descriptive sentences
- Not really interesting
DO YOU LIKE THE NOVEL?
- Can't properly judge since it's still in Chapter One.
IS IT WORTH A READ? WILL YOU PUT IT IN YOUR LIBRARY?
- I don't want to hurt your feelings, but as a reviewer I want to honestly state my opinion. It sounds interesting, but it only sounds interesting because I could see potential within it. But if you ask me if I will put in my library... I will still wait till the author fixes the issues within his or her book.
SUGGESTIONS
- You need to work on the placement of your commas.
You can use this link as a guide: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/owlprint/607/ - Improve your narration and balance everything out.
If you want to improve your narrative story, you can use this link as a guide: http://www.writersdigest.com/whats-new/25-ways-to-improve-your-writing-in-30-minutes-a-day
Poche Hi nazell, I hope you don't mind me stating my opinions about your book :smiley:. BTW... I like the book cover :thumbup:
SYNOPSIS
ISSUES
- Doesn't give much impact.
- "Can Drusus Zephyro satisfy his obsession? Can the four species live in harmony?" This was supposed to be a good ending for your synopsis, it's an honest opinion of mine. But it lost it's baiting effect :cry: . I know it's probably hard to write a synopsis (every writer's problem), but always remember, just like buying a book in the bookstore, some/most readers would read the synopsis to check whether it is worth wasting your time and money. That's why, you have to pour all your effort to make sure your synopsis sounds interesting. Create the best baiting effect for your book.
- Rewrite your synopsis and make it interesting.
CHAPTER ONE
ISSUES:
- Sentence Construction
- The use of commas.
- Misuse of Tenses
- Lifeless and a bit awkward character dialogues
- Lacks descriptive sentences
- Not really interesting
DO YOU LIKE THE NOVEL?
- Can't properly judge since it's still in Chapter One.
IS IT WORTH A READ? WILL YOU PUT IT IN YOUR LIBRARY?
- I don't want to hurt your feelings, but as a reviewer I want to honestly state my opinion. It sounds interesting, but it only sounds interesting because I could see potential within it. But if you ask me if I will put in my library... I will still wait till the author fixes the issues within his or her book.
SUGGESTIONS
- You need to work on the placement of your commas.
You can use this link as a guide: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/owlprint/607/ - Improve your narration and balance everything out.
If you want to improve your narrative story, you can use this link as a guide: http://www.writersdigest.com/whats-new/25-ways-to-improve-your-writing-in-30-minutes-a-day
P.S. I hope you aren't disheartened, offended, or angry about this review.
- YNNIE234
Poche Oh! okay... I understand now.. you can always ask for an editor to help you, just simply fill in this form in order for you to get a chance to have your own personal editor or reviewer :) https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScOPkZ4PYz6N6SsZxwgsH0c00I61gVa6MRfkwpyN7SeMJWj9Q/viewform?usp=pp_url
KingBiBiK Hi there kibibik!
SYNOPSIS
ISSUES
- Sounds more like a prologue than a synopsis. You need to revise it later on.
CHAPTERS
ISSUES
- Misspelled words
- There are some grammar errors.
- Punctuation in some sentences
etc.
Use this form: https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScOPkZ4PYz6N6SsZxwgsH0c00I61gVa6MRfkwpyN7SeMJWj9Q/viewform?usp=pp_url to get a much more defined review for your book. It would be better if you had a discord, for a much more faster reply.
KingBiBiK Hi there kibibik!
SYNOPSIS
ISSUES
- Sounds more like a prologue than a synopsis. You need to revise it later on.
CHAPTERS
ISSUES
- Misspelled words
- There are some grammar errors.
- Punctuation in some sentences
etc.
Use this form: https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScOPkZ4PYz6N6SsZxwgsH0c00I61gVa6MRfkwpyN7SeMJWj9Q/viewform?usp=pp_url to get a much more defined review for your book. It would be better if you had a discord, for a much more faster reply.
I would appreciate a review!
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11067021205253605
Fantasy
This is a story I have been brewing for a while now but would always put off starting.
I plan on doing a few chapters a week 2-3 unless I get some more time off form my job then bonus chapters!
I am new to writing so any help or comments are appreciated.
Hi! I would like to request for a review.
This is the link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/11076106506249505/A-Certain-Man's-Idyllic-Morning
It is a oneshot story with only a thousand words.