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demi Great novel, started short but increased in word count later on. Added to the library for free time reading, keep up the good work and good luck!

Thank you for the review, I will try take what you said on board and aim to improve :)
creativewritting

Thank you for your feedback and tips, I will work hard to improve the quality of my novel!

DonaldTrump Hello DT, I would like to thank you for writing this, beautifully written with barely any grammar issues. After reading it for a while I concluded three issues that are common, other minor issues will be ignored as you can read it out loud and that helps most new authors familiarize themselves with their own work.

Issues (Based on chapter 1-10)

• Transitional Phrases (can be improved greatly)
• Sentence Starts (can be improved)
• Unclear antecedent (words are to be reconsidered before writing as it may indicate other things)

This is the three issues I have personally seen the novel but what I am impressed more is the improvement rate from chapter 1 to 10, good job on that!

Link to help out with unclear antecedent : https://writingcommons.org/open-text/style/grammar/1237-identifying-and-addressing-unclear-pronouns-antecedents

(Will try to mention several parts in our document for writing resources)

Keep up the good work and good luck with everything!

-DKQ

DKQ Thank you very much for your feedback! I'll be sure keep an eye out for those issues.

Heaven_Dream If second person was what you were going for I applaud your guts! Second person is a hard point of view to use and keep your reader. But I think it’s working for you! The only thing is keep your point of view consistent, sometimes you slip from second to third.

Be careful not steal your own thunder. What I mean by this is give you reader the unexpected event and don’t warn them like you did here:
“Clearly, there is something unexpected that will happen.”
Another way you stole your own thunder was ‘with these’. This version of stealing your own thunder is okay and is entirely a stylistic choice. It’s just something to be wary of using too much.

Another thing is you have several spots where you are telling your reader what’s happening. In these spots try to shift your language to describing. Doing this will help entertain your reader.
Keep it up! :)

creativewritting Thanks.

I have to say that English is not my first language. So something that makes sense in my head. Doesn't really translate on the paper. But, I would like to improve and make my novel a better read for the readers.

Looking forward to your insights and I really appreciate your help.

Thanks for all your effort! You're truly helping a lot of us authors through your reviews.
If you have the time, I hope, you could review my novel, too, since I didn't get much reader feedback till now

Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/10609838905077905/Oh.-My.-Fate%3F!
Genre: Romance Fiction
Updates: daily, 2 regular chapters + 1 additional chapter might be released
What I think about it as an author: This novel is basically a mix of different genres. Romance Fiction being the underlying main genre, but that aspects starts a little late, so I'm not really sure, if it's okay for the audience of Romance novels. I also do know there are some grammatical errors, though I'm working on it at the moment.

mud7 Hello mud, a better way to improve your language is to read what you wrote out-loud it is the method I used mostly. Sometimes when I am driving for long, I would speak to myself a script I was thinking about, for example, "9 years ago my friend betrayed me, took away my wife, family, and friends. I trusted him more than I had trusted myself, Today... I am a monster, I am the one and only king of this land!" sounds idiotic but during the time I am speaking to myself, I will try to fix the mistakes or change the entire script to make it more interesting to myself and others reading it.

Example 2 after thinking about it and reading it loud:
"My friend, you have changed me, took away everything I had, my entire life for nine years has been to survive after your betrayal" Sigh looking at the cold body that is hanging on my left hand, I spoke with rage "Was it worth it?!"

Hopefully, this can help you out a bit, good luck and keep up the good work!

-DKQ

yansusustories Oh my fate... A masterpiece of ages! Have been following this and I have many things to talk about! Issues are found in every novel, but yours is unique, reading it once, you will never notice anything unless you are a graduate student or above, the idea is portrayed in a very fantastic way which intrigues the reader to continue from chapter 1 to the end without stopping! (Happened to me) The issues within are something that can be seen after focusing on the story. The first significant issue is the title, yes having the same title for several chapters is terrible, it shows the reader that the story will be focused on that location or fight for a long time. To fix this, I would recommend having a variety of titles, and this alone can improve the quality of the entire novel!

Issues (Chapter 1 to 19)

• Title name (Major)
• squinting modifier (Can see improvement)
• possessive adjective (Referenced link)
• Unnecessary comma usage (Seen commonly during the first ten chapters)
• unnecessary ellipsis (Used in wrong dialogues which lower the quality of the novel)
• Confused preposition (Seen chapter 1, 5 and 9)

As I have explained some of the issues, the rest is to be done by re-reading your old chapters which is the best way to improve yourself! Good luck and keep up the good work! (If you wish for more assistance discord is available)

Reference to help out with those issues:
https://www.wattpad.com/298184109-writing-tips-naming-your-book-chapters
http://grammar.yourdictionary.com/punctuation/when-to-use-ellipses.html
https://www.englishpractice.com/common-mistakes/commonly-confused-prepositions/
http://www.softschools.com/examples/grammar/possessive_adjectives_versus_possessive_pronouns_examples/82/

-DKQ

DKQ Oh my god, thank you so much! Commas and prepositions aside, I never would have thought about those things ... I'm gonna start editing right tommorow morning. :)

Hello everyone!

We are still looking for editors and reviewers who are free to help authors whenever they can. If you guys are interested you can join the discord server and contact DKQ or Creativewriting.

-DKQ

Hi guys. I started working on my story. Right now i have created 6 chapters. I have uploaded 2, and i am editing the other 4, they should be uploaded between today and tomorrow. And i will keep uploading 2 chapters daily.

I would love some feedback and thank you

NAME: The Great Realm Portal
GENRE: Fantasy
LINK: https://www.webnovel.com/book/10674708505099705/The-Great-Realm-Portal.

There may be some grammatical errors, but this is my first novel. I missed the deadline to have a free book cover, so i had to hire someone to create it for me. Thank you for the support guys.