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TheOldFogey Hello Old Frog! Just finished reading your first chapter and I found it quite interesting and it gave me a good time while skimming through the first chapter, let us go through the issues that can be improved as the only things I have found were spelling mistakes and phrasing.

Issues

• Words Usage ("It had two curved, ebony horns protruding from its head with many jagged scars running across its gargantuan frame. The reptile-like creature slowly rose from its kneeling position to stand at a colossal height of ten meters creating a truly intimidating aura. " could be changed to "It had two curved, ebony horns protruding from its head with many jagged scars running across its massive frame. The reptile-like creature slowly rose from its kneeling position to stand at a towering height of ten meters creating a genuinely intimidating aura.")
• Unclear Antecedent (Someones you say "That", "him", "Her" and that confuses me from time to time as I noticed in the first chapter there are 2 cases where you didn't mention who was "That" person, would be great to go through your first chapter again.
• archaic wording ("serve him as a subordinate thereafter." should be "serve him as a subordinate after that.")

Thats all really, nothing more, nothing less :)

Namake Beautiful beginning! The title became the first thing the mc has said, and the first paragraph is his reaction, well played on that part! I have also noticed how well written some parts in your novel are, including the small details which I personally would recommend all authors to do from time to time. Issues can be found but this time I can only state one, the rest would be up to you author.

ISsue

• Sentence Fragment (A complete sentence requires a main clause, which includes a subject, a verb, and a complete thought. When one of these components is missing, the result is called a sentence fragment or incomplete sentence. To correct the problem, the fragment must be rewritten to include a main clause or joined in some way with the existing main clause of another sentence.)

That is the only issue I see other than the common things seen everywhere, I hope this helps. Keep up the good work and good luck~!

• DKQ

https://www.webnovel.com/book/10766314206160005/The-Endless-Journey

Fantasy

I want to improve but don't know what I'm doing wrong. Please give me feedback on the writing as well as if the story is interesting. Thank you.

1-2 Chapters a day.

DKQ @WEBNOVEL_OFFICIAL pls. Sticky this post, too many similar threads popping up recently and it floods the forum. Thanks.

DKQ Thank you! Finally someone who knows a thing or two on the boundless dao of writing! Looking forward to future interactions through discord and collaborations with editors from there.
I'll take your suggestions into account and ammend those problems.

DKQ Thank you! Finally someone who knows a thing or two on the boundless dao of writing! Looking forward to future interactions through discord and collaborations with editors from there.
I'll take your suggestions into account and ammend those problems.

asdujas You have an intriguingly short synopsis. I like your story, but you should have more variation in sentence lengths. By taking short sentences and lengthening them you can increase your readers level of tension by increasing the amount of time it takes for them to read what you wrote.
https://www.standoutbooks.com/10-facts-tell-how-use-tension-your-story/ is a resource with some other helpful information on increasing your reader's tension.
I would recommend reading your story, slowly and carefully out loud, to help catch some of the words you’ve dropped.
Please keep writing!

DKQ It's a good thing that I checked the forum... This will help in the editing... Well, I'm still at a pending status with this novel though since I haven't received an actual reply from OldFogey

Looking for more reviewers and editors to join us on discord, also new updates on the reviews as it will be a maximum of 10 daily except Fridays.

Quick update on editors, all 4 editors have their hands full at the moment while 1 is only available if you are looking for an editor, you can post it through discord and wait for a response from them, thank you.

Icehall yes :)

DKQ
Got it, thanks!

NEZUMI_23 how about helping me?

[unknown] If you would like to get an editor help I would recommend using discord, most editors got 6 novels while the others should be free (about one or two left to help out with editing).

Quick update to everyone that are following this or are new to this thread:

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Thank you and good luck everyone :)

DKQ Thank you so much for the help!

DKQ ok, thank you

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