Mrtin_Monarch I have left a review, comments for your story. Honestly, I saw that you repetitively miss the capital letter "I" when writing. There were numerous across the story so I think you need to at least edits those.
The prologue was good but the war I thought it was between Darkness and the other siblings but then in Chapter 1 it was war with the mother, Order. And I got a little confuse on the objective of the war. He was suppose to be Chaos's successor, then he lose the war but he is still the successor, not sure what he is fighting for? Pride? Vengeance for making him weak ? Sorry if I am direct about my review.

      Sereinchoo

      I would love to hear your opinion on my own as well! Here's a link to my 1st chapter. There're only 2 chapters so far, but in any case, I'd appreciate it if you can leave a review. Let me know what you think and what I can do to improve my writing in the future chapters. I will check out and review your story as well 👌

      https://www.webnovel.com/book/25374053606032405/68118009885019517?utm_campaign=4320409653

      TallyArtist I will do the same with yours as well! So please check out mine too and leave a review/comment 👌

            MusingsOfTheFourth Hi just reviewed yours. I added collection, left comments and a review. Please do the same mine. Thanks ya. Here's the honest review:-
            It is an awfully long first chapter. I do suggest to make them into smaller portions because it's better to get more readers in any platform (I get that too for my story - but haven't gotten the time to do it Haha)
            Anyway - Adele and Lila, and the fight with Carla. For a first chap it was a great intro to the characters and explain the reasons for the fight between Lila and Carla, Lila's objective (but just explaining them and their fight - it is a really long chapter for that). Maybe make a prologue of Adele's background and her obsession with Swan Lake that might reduce the first chap word count (so you don't have to explain it in the first chap).

            Your logic first chap intro then 2nd chap is the isekai is good.
            Just that if your first chap is too long, it makes readers run away.

            Your blurb is too long too. I would suggest you to make it shorter as well or use your blurb (as the prologue) to make the readers stay for the story like bait because I didn't read the blurb - I jumped into the story and I thought it was just another story abt ballerinas and girl fighting for roles etc.(that's just me, someone else might have different ideas).

                Sereinchoo You seem to be quite the interesting reviewer. How about we review swap as well?

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