DARK_DEKU I am afraid I can't bring myself to leave you a review for the book on your book page, unless you will be okay with me leaving a very negative review. I've read the whole book and I'll just leave my comments here:

  • Lack of plot
  • Immature tone, I am not sure if this intentional
  • Inadequate punctuation
  • Poor character development, including Max - I couldn't tell anything about him. He sounds like he is four of 10 idk
  • Insufficient descriptive elements; more suited for a play than a book

I hope this help you improve your book.

    skylit3r
    I already add yours to my collection, and I will review after reading the first five to ten chapters.

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