ThreyaMidnight Hey again, I normally leave reviews that focus on the author's strong points and the actual story, but I went ahead and added in some grammar, punctuation, and writing flow feedback to help you improve your writing. I also pointed out a few specific comments, paragraph comments, in the first half of Chapter One to make things easier to pinpoint. I'm looking forward to how you develop the story and how the characters grow over time!

      ForerunnerOfSky Hello, good evening/day, I made a review of your story! I hope you take my advice into consideration and not take it not as an insult but a suggestion for improvements 🙁(( It was a nice read, thank you for gracing me with such work!

          DragonImmortal Oh, it's fine! I actually appreciate that you made the effort to give my story a read and a review (and even comments, wow!). Thank you so much for allotting your precious time just to read mine. I will take your constructive criticism to heart. Once again, thank you.

            SuperAyan I just did it. I can't read all chapters yet but I like your story. It's funny, I will add it to my collection and read it in peace.

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