Wei_Wuxian_2902 whoever that guy that is introduced is, gives me very r*pey vibes. I dunno what angle you're going for at the beginning of the novel.

      AuHNG I got several ideas from Pinterest (take a look, please: https://br.pinterest.com/jnilson007/). But I would like to detail individual characteristics. Like, race can be described in a general way, but a specific individual has his quirks.

          @Wei_Wuxian_2902 writing isn't bad, but too little for me to critique. Already finished, and I'm mostly thinking... eh... whoever that guy is... is uh... creepy.

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              @AuHNG just read the first prologue. I liked the whole concept of the story and I already got hooked in first read so I added it to my collection 🥰.

              So Here's my suggestion. I'm a peson who likes feeling the ambience of a scene so I would recommend to incorporate a detailed or just a brief descreption of where, when, and what is the setting of the whole scene just to emphasize the vibe it embodies whether it is calm, chaotic, or whatever. But Put a little grain of salt on this cause Im just starting to write novels so, yeah 🥴😆

                DarkStarSword Yes, those are valid points, and I think the only reason I didn't was to shorten the chapter, since it was already super long.

                  UelUel minor things I would change. Instead of saying we have, it would be better as: we had no idea….

                    UelUel even though eng is not ur first language, its pretty good.

                      UelUel yeah its too much to like... digest? for the first time read? I felt like I was reading ur outline for the novel, rather than a chapter. Try to stick to what is necessary. U can explain the rest later.

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