Choka Sure thang! Are you sure you don't want a review there? Just an honest review here?

      Name: Broadcast revealed I am A Medical Genius/God

      Humanity are social creatures they say but when money is given these creatures forget everything. The exact same thing happened, when the government issued a special experiment known as broadcasting of 14 people in one city or town without anyone else there, many human right activists protested.
      But when government fed them money and the people who liked the idea started to invest, no one had a choice but to follow the instructions. The 14 people who were chosen were all different celebrities from different countries.
      People thought that celebrities like these would just eliminate each other, and the government also concluded that also but when the game started, they were all in deep surprises because of one man only.

      This man was a actor with a huge fan following but being trapped with only 14 people revealed his true talents which left everyone in awe.

      So yeah, this is going to be fantasy and also there will be reactions to main protagonist's actions. No system only a genius brain will be there.

      Also pls read the two chapters before commenting since the first chapter is kind of cringe along with boring

      https://www.webnovel.com/book/broadcast-revealed-i-am-a-medical-genius-god_27163902606875105

      And yes I will review swap if anyone wants to.

        Scorpious_star I don't mind that, but make it honest not just nice words cause I really wanna know if my first chapters are good or not , I sent the power stones and thank you.

            Choka There is a line in your novel in the first chapter where it says from herbs he 'have' you should change it to he 'had' Also the paragraphs are broken. at least make a para of about three lines. short sentences make it weird to read. In the second last paragraph the second line planes 'who' should be changed to planes 'that'. second chapter 7th paragraph you changed from the past tense to the present tense in one sentence. stick to one tense. It will be easier for the readers to understand if the moment is taking place now or has already happened in the past. it might get confusing if you keep changing it in one sentence. The third last paragraph has a typo. The last line again has a similar mistake. you can understand it once you read it. Also, the writing is great but in the part where you have mentioned the snake, try adding where it comes from it just suddenly appeared but the part is not really clear when reading, also the part where the snake comes forward can also be modified a little. Over all well written but I think you need to make these few changes and we are good to go! <3 hope this helps you with your future chapters!!

                Scorpious_star but all you did was tell me about grammar mistakes. What i want is to tell me your thoughts about the story and writing not grammar mistakes.

                    Choka As I mentioned earlier in my entire text, your writing and the story line is great but it needs a little editing here and there to make it sound even clear to the readers. Sometimes the pace is slow and other times it makes me think that everything is happening in the blink of an eye. The parts where I told you about your grammar mistakes are the ones that I had to reread over and over. Also, the thoughts and dialogues of the Characters sometimes mix up making it unclear if he is thinking out loud or in his/her mind. Overall if you continue the story at a normal pace, it is a great read.

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