As the title says above, I want you to give your own opinions and idea to my novel so that I could further improve my novel better. Please take a look at my novel.

Title of the novel: Moonlight Sword Sect.

Brief synopsis of the novel: About the cultivators of the Moonlight Sword Sect experiencing the changing world of both mortal world and the cultivation world.

Brief summary of the early chapters: Introduction of characters, who they are and what are their personalities. I will start taking the novel into a much more deeper story as soon as I finish writing about every characters that will make an impact within the story.

Here's my novel link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/11360999505350405

Thank you.

Please no bully. Thanks.

    I like the first person view. It feels unique. The way you write also makes the chapter soft and bright. This Rabbink has only checked the fist chapter since it was already night in my place. This had a good description like other female MC novels.

    I think I only found some inconsistent in tenses usage. A bit confusing, but as a non native, This Rabbink could read no problem.

      MasterRabbink Ohhh thank you for your review. I'm sorry for my grammatical errors haha.. m( )m

          Myriad_ Please no bully. Thanks.

          Just checking, but do you consider constructive criticism as bullying?

              It's a personal choice but I don't enjoy first person present tense. Always feels off when you think into how the person is writing the story as they are living. You also at points flipped between past and present the words are understood and the same meaning is there but it is the small thing that later matter.

              Next would a smoother transition between the two narrators I didn't know at first read through they were different. I thought it was a time skip or well a time skip. I was suspicious when I read "soon-to-be-wife" but it's 2018 I can't judge.

              Overall, the main idea is there and visible just have to start work along the edges to smooth things out. I look forward to see where things go.

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