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Avalondra Thank you for your kind words. Er Gen books are among the best of the genre for sure, and he gets better with each one. I definitely learned a lot from him. I'm the type that tries to write something small but can't help but get dragged on to the larger picture. That's why I think about other events going aside from the MC's journey. And that's also why I stopped posting daily chapters and decided to release them by books. There were a lot of things I could do better. I hope I can keep meeting your expectations and deliver even better stories.

vincesocoo I've already reviewed yours, my friend! :)

YoungOneStories I did. I liked the stories you told. The chapters in the first volume are very long, which might drive some people alway because it's hard to read in one sitting. The beginning felt a bit rushed, I'd take some time to revise and try to make it a little better because that's your introduction to the novel. Since your chapters are long people might put it aside and maybe cost you views. But it's very interesting, and that's the part that matters.

Anyone else for a review swap?

Avalondra I loved your novel and left an honest review. I'm impressed and even added it to the library. There were a few mistakes that will easily get corrected after editing but nothing that distracted me from enjoying your writing.

vincesocoo Can you take a look at mine as well? https://www.webnovel.com/book/11779557605524605/Journey-Of-The-Bright-Immortal

Thanks!

Title: Journey Of The Bright Immortal
Genre: Eastern Fantasy (Xianxia)
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11779557605524605/Journey-Of-The-Bright-Immortal

Please like this post or send me a PM if you would like me to take a look at your novel. I don't mind reviewing it first since I'd like to check it out before agreeing to a swap. Sometimes I can't endorse a novel if I can't be honest about it. Thanks in advance for those who will take their time to review my novel.

Heaven_Dream I've read it and left a review. It reminded me of a few Chinese web novels I've liked.

Nightmare_weaver I've reviewed yours too! Keep up the good work!

Mine is Eastern Fantasy (Xianxia):
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11779557605524605/Journey-Of-The-Bright-Immortal

I'll review yours later today!

Arkinslize Thank you. No, I'm not a native speaker. I would be grateful if you could point me to some of those weird sentences :) I think I read the chapters too much to find them. I'm aiming for a final grammar/style review before I'm happy with the paperback.

vincesocoo Hey, I've left you a review. Your initial story hook was truly refreshing, and the way you developed the story was good. It will be fun to see where the story will go. One downside is that I really have trouble understanding why a certain character was still on the party, and why the MC puts up with him. It ends up making me dislike the MC a bit, but that's probably just my inner LN reader being picky.

Gourmet_DAO May I suggest ProWritingAid instead of Grammarly? It also has a free version and I think it's much better (although you can use both). You can also run your text through HemmingwayApp, free and available online. Using all those together might fix a lot of mistakes and help you get better, they certainly helped me.

Gourmet_DAO Dialogue is hard to grasp. I think when it's good the reader instinctively knows who's speaking without you having to name them, but we can't expect that to happen every time. It's good to try to follow a line with action, because that will give you an excuse to name the person without using "say, said". But this is also not very realistic if there's too much dialogue. In Light/Web Novels, I think it's good enough to use the name before the line, especially if there are multiple characters often. Example:

Hamlet: "Wow, I found a treasure!"
Horatio: "You found a treasure?!"
Dara: "Yaay!"

But, no matter what, you should be consistent and don't switch from your style unless there's something to justify it. When we're reading a lot of text it can distract from the information if the formatting is not consistent.

Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/11779557605524605/Journey-Of-The-Bright-Immortal
Title: Journey Of The Bright Immortal
Genre: Eastern fantasy
Tag(3): Cultivation, Male MC, Creation Of Own Skills
Synopsis:

Cultivation ruled everything in this world.
Humans and other species could sense the Qi of Heaven and Earth and break the barriers of mortality. They molded their mortal bodies through cultivation, gaining immense power and vitality.
All to reach the realm of immortals.
Billions strived from an early age to reach the Heavens and yet only a small part could cultivate. Cultivators, true gods among men and symbols of power and prestige, often treated common mortals as livestock or servants. As time passed and society adapted, a group of supreme beings enforced honor and justice. Cultivators no longer trampled mortals with ease, but they didn't always respect the rules. Absolute strength tore rules apart without effort, and clans and sects stood at the peak of power.
With many worlds, countless territories, and beings, humans were often mistaken as the weakest species. Traveling between worlds was difficult, but the realms contained mysterious ways and arts.
Ming Ren was born in the Bright Clan but deemed an untalented cultivator. However, his curiosity was unsurpassed under the heavens! Determined to uncover the path to the True Heavenly Dao and armed with an indomitable spirit and powerful companions, will he be able to surpass the gods and protect everything he cares about?

Gourmet_DAO thank you. I've read and reviewed one of your histories, The Adventures Of Treasure Hunters. It was interesting. As you are aware of the formal writing issues, I won't dwell on those, they can be fixed at any time. I know you were trying to differentiate between speakers, but it throws me off as a reader when you speak with " " and then switch to " -- ", so you might want to look if it's better to keep it that way or not :)

I think you are aware that the good points in your novel are the interactions between characters and the mysteries during treasure hunting. When you get about to reviewing, those should be your focus to strengthen. I usually like my histories with a little more action, but even with a lot of info, yours was interesting.

I will also leave my story for anyone interested in reviewing it. Please reply and let me know if you would like a review in return and I will also do my best to review other novels.
Novel: Journey Of The Bright Immortal (Eastern Fantasy - Xianxia with some western elements)
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11779557605524605/Journey-Of-The-Bright-Immortal

My story doesn't have many reviews. I don't write daily and it has been a while since I decided to release multiple chapters at once (by book). I would appreciate any reviews and I will be reviewing some novels as well as soon as I can.
Novel: Journey Of The Bright Immortal (Eastern Fantasy - Xianxia with possibly some western elements)
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11779557605524605/Journey-Of-The-Bright-Immortal

Thank you!