Ventus_Hikari
I'm not sure how many editors you can find around Webnovel who would work for free or even an amateur for that matter. You should look into those proof-reading programs that I mentioned before, Grammarly is only one of them. Don't just obey everything Grammarly tells you to do, but use it as a means to better yourself by manually checking each correction. Sometimes even a robot can make mistakes, so that's why it's better to manually handle it.
I'm not available nor am I looking to be an editor, BUT I did rewrite your synopsis that you linked in this thread. I hope you not only enjoy it, but I also hope you learn from it. I'm not a professional by any means, but I'm a native English-speaker and writer, and I've taken both writing and fantasy writing courses for college, and even some extra-credit High School classes.
This was your original synopsis. It was decent, but it told more than it showed. You know the saying, "show, don't tell".
*Albert Hawk never thought that one day, the faction he created would turn into his biggest enemy! Everyone always said, the strongest would rule the world, but this quote wasn't always true! He was the strongest in the continent, everyone afraid to him, and anyone who disobey him will die. But! Everyone who forced to submitted to him hate him to the core.
Then, they start to make a plan to betrayed Albert. They make a grand scale ambush and success to injured Albert till he didn't have much hope to survive!
Suddenly, a beautiful woman come and tried to save him. Albert and this woman just an acquaintance. They never close to each other or have any intimate relationship. So, Albert wondering, why would she helped him?*
I'll be honest. It's not horrible, but it's very rough. You can tell the writer wasn't natively English, as it comes across through the short story you wrote. A synopsis, in my mind, is a question you ask the reader to hook them in. It's conflict, just enough to show how your world functions and what problems your protagonist faces, while not giving away too much of the essential plot.
Now, I'll post my synopsis. It's not perfect, it's really not... but it should be useful to learn from.
*Albert Hawk towered over countless denizens as he vied for power, his grand plan was the formation of a single empire, and through many countless years of bloodshed and tears, he had finally done it—the birth of a nation.
It was common knowledge throughout the world that the strong would always hold dominion over the weak, nothing could break such a rule. However, what would happen when the mighty fell into nothingness? Betrayed by the very forces he once built, Albert had to accept the challenge head on or face annihilation.
He had faced many dangers before, from the horrible plots of a sinister shroud of traitors to the machinations of evil moving against him. For countless years Albert held control, forcing the darkness into hiding. This, however, had only grown their fury, creating a desire for destruction all the greater.
In a moment of weakness, he was struck down by those around him, betrayed by forces within his own empire. A grand ambush, one that would leave nothing but ash and fire in its wake.
Those who hid within the shadows had delivered a crippling blow to Albert, forcing him into hiding so as to regain his strength. This, of course, had left his empire open and defenseless, which only incentivized those demons all the more.
Faced with a horrible affliction, Albert hid, believing no one could possibly find him. That was, until a mysterious woman draped in a pure-white gown appeared before him, her face unknown and curious. She came to him in his hour of need, offering to provide him with a means to retake his empire.
But at what cost?*
It tells the same story that yours does, but it does it differently. It's a bit longer, but even that could be cut down to save some words. I only made it that long because I was trying to stay as true to your image as I could.
Not only does my synopsis show more than it tells, but it also provides a question for the readers. They're introduced to the world, they know about the general conflict which our main character faces, and they even know about the sinister plot to overthrow Albert. Once that is all said and done, they meet the mysterious and aloof woman who is draped in a snow-white dazzled cloak. This, of course, was my own creative spin so as to provide an image that the readers could see.
When you introduced the woman, you mentioned two or three times that they were unfamiliar with one another, and that isn't necessary. Say it once, and move on.
My synopsis isn't perfect, in fact, it's far from it. It will, however, read better for an English audience, and it feels more Western in style.
You can use this synopsis, but please—please, learn something from it! Also, I'd appreciate a mention of my name, but ONLY if you use mine. Otherwise, you're good.
your synopsis is pretty well done. I guess it’s also why my novel didn’t get much view.
