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Author: PerishAndRuin
Title: Swan Dive Riot
Genre: Fantasy, Isekai
Novel Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12752686705059805/Swan-Dive-Riot
Synopsis:
One of the best hitman on earth, earned the nickname "The Walking Disaster", misforture has clung to him since the day he was born, but other than that his skill were top class.

He was even considered a living weapon by the government.

While tasked to eliminate a prominent individual he was betrayed by his partner in turn leading to his death.

His soul inevitably sucked into another world reincarnating him into a baby still intact with his previous memories, skills, and knowledge of his past life.

All the more this world is a world of sword, magic, and.. Monstrous creatures? It doesn't help that the power that is bestowed on him is next to nothing? it seems his bad luck has carried over to this world as well.

How will a highly trained assassin that only knows how to kill maneuver through this world?

How will he find out the reason for this reincarnation?

minyol
Hi im not new here but i just recently write my very first ever novel. I know that my work is not fantastic as the others and my grammar is worst because english language is my 3rd language. So hopefully you can review my work and tell me my flaws.

Author: anne_2
Title: I'll reach the stars and moon for you
Genre: Romance fiction
Link: http://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/12514282106704405
Sypnosis:
His face was so close to hers, that she could see his pure hazel eyes with cold and distant aura. Hesitantly she reached out to touched him the lightest brush of her fingers over his slender fingers yet strong hands and she said “i’m sorry..” yet he brushoff her hand and look her with disgust all over his face.
“....”
“You dare to say sorry and you dare to abort my child”he said with anger flashes in his eyes. He never have thought he will see her here in Singapore specifically in Pan Pacific hotel where his assistant booked for his business trip. Turning his gaze to his assistant “send Mr. Qin at my room when he come.” As he said this he straighten his body and rise from his seat and leave without turning his head to the girl standing beside his table.

The girl clutch the edge of the table as she was confused to what he said.
‘Ah w-what? C-child? A-abort?’”pffft”.
‘Is he crazy? We did the deed once and we’re in influence of alcohol...and as i remember he never liked me more over I’m head over heels to him? and most I’m not preggy right?

Hoping for your comments ang suggestions. Thank you

Thank you, you're so kind :))))

Author: Hwarangskz
Title: Brittania in the New World
Genre: War & Military Fiction, Isekai, Politics
Novel Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12623271905188805/Brittania-in-the-New-World
Synopsis:
In the year 2019, the British Isles suddenly lost contact with all foreign governments. And found themselves to be transported to another world!, the United Kingdom dispatches the Royal Air Force to scout the remaining seas.

Their discovery lead them to contact with an early modern era civilization that has knowledge on magic. But an aggressive expansionist empire is on the march to all sides of the continent. People die one by one, cities pillaged and razed to the ground. Britain find itself to be dragged in this huge war that will wreck havoc in the continent. What kind of future the United Kingdom holds for the continent?

minyol Hi there! Thank you. I have just published my second novel. Would love if we could swap the reviews.
I would be willing to swap reviews with anyone who is interested.

The details are:

TITLE: Two Contracts - My Lover is a CEO
AUTHOR: MishaK
GENRE: Romance
LINK: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12757649906124705
SYNOPSIS: An affair with Ying Yue almost costed him his sanity.

“I told no woman is allowed in my room!” he snatched the papers from her hands and hurled them in the air. “Leave this room! Now!” His resentment was clearly showing, he was furious, as he became breathless.

Cold and aloof, with distressingly good looks, Yang Xinyu was the most eligible bachelor of City H. The magazines also labeled him as the most handsome demon king devoid of any emotions who was only interested in making money. Being a CEO of a multi-billion software company, he could have girlfriends at the drop of a hat.

But after a chance event he was drawn to the pert and beautiful youth of Wu Lina. Was this love or madness to possess her, cage her?

A brilliant and demure girl, Wu Lina was tied into a lifetime of sorrows and pain with two extremely binding contracts.

Can Yang Xinyu and Wu Lina be happy together?

He came and stood in front of her and pulled her chin up with one hand. His other hand snaked her tiny waist to pull her closer to him. He pressed her hard as if trying to merge her into his body.

“You know how I yearn for you…” he kissed her lightly on her lips. “Please Lina…” he continued brushing against her lips.

Her eyes became misty. She tried her best not to show her weakness to him but tears came unbridled.

@MishaK Hi there! Just wanna say that I noticed that you changed the cover of Inconvenient Wife....I like it and I think it brings off the story better than the previous...Just saying.. :)

Nightmare_Taichou Thanks. The previous cover was temporary:)

THX

Author: UnderTheBlue
Title: Immortal Ki Technique
Genre: Eastern Fantasy
Novel link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/11572569105438905/Immortal-Ki-Technique
Synopsis: In life I devoted myself to my King and my martial arts, giving up everything else: friends, family, love and even wealth. After death, I was reborn into a world filled with powerful beasts and chaos. Why can't I have it all on my second chance?

Hey guys I would like to have reviews for my works. Thanks in advance
Title:My life belongs to you
Author: Shiristhi
Genre: Romantic fiction
Here is the Link:
https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/12560562706908505

Thanks a lot for your feedback in advance.

Here are the details for my book:
Author: PoppyQueen
Title: Crimson Love
Genre: Horror and Thriller
Novel link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12631493005234005/Crimson-Love(BL)
Synopsis: Mark is passionate and doesn't let his flaws hold him back. Akio is flawless on the surface.However,when they both cross paths,they are lead through a series of rape,drugs and even murder.Could these individuals be hiding more than there seems to be?
BL storyFour unrelated university students are leading normal lives until destiny plays a game and throws them in dark,twisted web of love and betrayal.All have equally important roles to untangle others and themselves.The question is will they succeed?

olufemi24 Navigate to it in a web browser instead of the app is how I get my link.

That's so sweet of you!
Here is my story:
Author: J_M_Wong
Title: Mercy Reaper- Mr. Mage
Genre: Magical Realism
Novel link:https://www.webnovel.com/book/12802831506428805/Mercy-Reaper-Mr.-Mage
Synopsis: Drea, a little girl who has to constantly fight against a "monster" that lives in her, finds herself coming face to face to a Mage who grants her wishes and brings her on a magical journey every night when everyone's asleep. What will be her wishes? How will she defeat the "monster" with the Mage's help? And who is exactly this mysterious Mage? What's his true identity and intentions?

Hey buddy can you review my work and tell me the areas I need improvement in .
https://www.webnovel.com/book/12653004805371405/CHAOTIC-ASURA
Author :Sakiv Garuda

Synopsis :Chaos is the beginning ,chaos is the end ,chaos is the truth. In the world where everyone is born with an attribute that brings the ire of everyone ,every time he is born he brings the chaos himself and complete destruction. Born with 7 attributes he should have been a genius the world envy but he was sent to exile after he was born. The path he choose challenge the heavens or succumb to heavens it is all upto him now . The path he choose is of the Asura.

minyol Then I will shamelessly put mine here :D hahaha I'll add yours to my library, read and review!

Author: Qianru
Title: Beauty is a Beast
Genre: Fantasy, Xuanhuan, Martial Arts(?)
Novel link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12733890505925405/Beauty-is-a-Beast
Sypnosis: Li Wei came from another world where magic is still greatly used...One day, they stumbled upon a black portal which leads to another world. Just like that, her life in there is just beginning.

Cold and Merciless. That's what she is. That was her training mold her.
She was a beauty who killed like a beast, killing them without mercy. If death was a girl, it would be her.

Even as a kid and as of now that she became an adult, white roses were her favorite flower.
And every time she made her move...
That roses will be tainted with red.

minyol

It's my first, so hope you like it! :)

Author: lets_get_this_rice
Title: Devolved: path of the beast
Link:https://m.webnovel.com/book/12772127005183605

synopsis:

Given an option he cannot trefuse, the boy will accept. Leaving the consequences for after he has reached his goal.

He refuses to back down.

He always will always strive.

He will never stop evolving.

Even if it means throwing his humanity away.

https://m.webnovel.com/book/12772127005183605

I'd really appreciate any response! I'm writing this for my own personal reasons, but I'd love some critique so i can improve as a writer.

Author: Couchroach
Title: Craw
Genre: Magical Realism, Fantasy, Cultivation(?), Martial Arts
Novel link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12818468006528805/CRAW
Synopsis: Born under the star of the crab, Rain is a Craw; considered by society to be weak, worthless, and only fit to be a servant because of one reason. Craw's are notoriously believed to be incapable of magic.

Orphaned, and impoverished Rain struggles to protect his sister who's been cursed and transformed into a black cat. Managing to join Odin's Fists: an organization of mercenaries sent out to complete high-risk tasks for equally high reward. Through determination and hard work, Rain has managed to fight equally against weak magicians and support his family.

However, prejudice is strong, and life is never static. Facing more and more struggles everyday Rain fights his own self-hatred and insecurities as much as he fights the world itself. Facing the dilemma of finding his own path in a world determined to force him down another.

minyol

Hello my friend!

You can give this a try as it's not a pure romance novel. :)
It's a fictional story and is ongoing.
It's an all in one novel dealing with mythical creatures. With right amount of mystery, suspense, adventure and romance.
Please do give it a read and maybe a review will help me a lot! This is my first novel and I expect honest reviews from you all! :)

NOVEL : The Bewitched Soul
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/13168629905940905

SYNOPSIS:
A 5 year old Margaret lived with her widowed mother in a small village of Brookville. For the little girl everything seemed perfect until one day her world drowned in an ocean of blood.
As the only survivor of the massacre, will Margaret be able to survive? Will she be able to unfold the mystery behind the death of her mother?

Thank you :)