My English is not very good, but I want to write a western magic novel, which friend can help me to see if my English standard is up to standard, and whether I can continue to write ...

《Invincible store system》

Holy Spirit Continent, Race Unlimited

A holy mage who can summon meteorites; An orc empire with a population of billions; The alluring and noble spirit ...

Gavin Jones was reborn here due to an accident.

He also came with a magic necklace that calls itself the "invincible store system".

[Dragon's Human Gene] [Ring of Soul] [Intensification Rune] [Advanced Cultivation Method] ... Everything can be bought in

this store.

This is the story of the birth of a great god!

Of course, it all starts with Jones becoming the Baron of Flower Town ...

    [unknown] You haven't reviewed my book still!

      LiNa_Author I wrote a review, the story is wonderful! Thanks to the author for the work, I am waiting for a review of one of my works. thank!

          Hello! Anyone interested in doing a review swap?

          For anyone who likes the rebirth type of novels, romance, family love, and mature contents. 😉

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          LIYA: A Rebirth Story
          Https://m.webnovel.com/book/14668795705238905

          Synopsis:
          She devoted 6 years of her life to her boyfriend.
          She hated her baby.
          She made her brother hate her.
          She killed herself.

          And when she opened her eyes, she was back.

          The little bun has been watching his mom. "Where's Daddy's morning kiss?" Jacob asked.

          Axel quickly seconded. "Uhuh, where's mine?"

          Liya giggled to their antics. Jacob was innocently clueless while the other one was shameless. She walked up to Axel and kissed his cheek, but at the last moment he turned to her, resulting to their lips touching.

          "Mmhh, what a good morning indeed." Axel commented. Liya just giggled again.

          "Hey, that's not fair." The two saw Jacob pouting. Why did he only get a kiss on the cheek?

          "Jacob, you should only kiss someone's lips if you want to marry the person. So from now on, Mommy's lips only belong to me. Understand?" Axel explained to the little child, his tone was serious but his eyes contained mirth.

          Jacob nodded. "Got it, Daddy!"

          "Save your lips for the right girl, alright?"

          "Okay, Daddy! I'll keep it in mind."

          "Good boy." Axel praised him and the little kid earned another pat on his head.

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            Sigheti I saw your review I had read the 1st chapter of your story will surely give feedback I’ll read further first... :) ps: how come a tree have so much emotion than me? lol

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