Reinesse
The paragraph length.... This has been pointed out to me by many people so I have tried to shorten the length in the later chapters.
Now that I have completed the first arc, I'll slowly start editing the chapters one by one.

The punctuation marks..... I'll definitely look into that as well since I myself am a bit of a grammar Nazi.

Misfit words.... Hmmm...... You are right about that as well, it's just I don't want to keep repeating the same words over n over again. I'll try to find better alternatives from here on out. :)

Show and tell : that's my weakness. Hai...

      Shiksha_Jerath

      Those non-fitting words, it's just actually all about connotation-- whether it's positive or negative and the likes. As for show and tell, it's easy. Just think of it as making your word count higher.

        Shiksha_Jerath it isn't really important to me to exchange reviews (we can do that anytime though) but I would highly appreciate it if you give my novel a read and criticize me....
        I'll start reading your novel in 1-2 days

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            Title: The Life Of A Time Mage

            Sypnopsis: You've heard of us Time Mages. About us manipulating time. It is true, but only to a minor extent. Like Element Mages who control their specific Elements, Time Mages control Time. Those fables about Time travelling is neither wrong nor accurate. We can Time travel, but we can't change the space. That's why it is called Time Frame Hopping.

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              Title: The Life Of A Time Mage

              Sypnopsis: You've heard of us Time Mages. About us manipulating time. It is true, but only to a minor extent. Like Element Mages who control their specific Elements, Time Mages control Time. Those fables about Time travelling is neither wrong nor accurate. We can Time travel, but we can't change the space. That's why it is called Time Frame Hopping.

                Reinesse Your story is sprinkled with all that fluff. I love it.
                Nothing much to say except that maybe the story should have a bit of a more serious tone if there are going to be mercenaries and killings in it.
                The characters also need to be a bit more fleshed out but maybe that's just me because the story is still in its early stages.

                Overall, it's a good option for binge reading on a rainy day :)

                    Shiksha_Jerath It's a rainy day here too. You're from India right?? Where do you live?? I'm from Gujarat. The rains have hit the state since a couple of days due to the cyclone Vayu

                        Shiksha_Jerath I read the first 2 chapters of your novel, and here is what I have to say,
                        You write beautifully, I have nothing to complain about the grammar(upto my knowledge) it was good.
                        I'd agree with reinesse on the long paragraphs and the info dump, since I lost interest after the info dump in chapter 2. You can try to give the information and present scenarios in form of dialogues with some sarcasm and humour to make it interesting, I'd prefer that over long paragraphs.
                        Other than that, you're great

                            Mavislin11

                            Your writing quality is nice but in terms of the novel itself, it can be sort of confusing. Some of the info dump was easy to absorb but as for character dump, I had difficulties with that. As for the story development, I've only read five or six chapters so I can't judge it yet but hopefully, the gist of the novel would show up around the tenth chapter. I'm not good at reviewing so I can just hope that this could help. As for the emotions of the characters, I wasn't able to empathize with them so maybe it would be nice if you can work on that.

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