@Allen_Clay012 Since it was the first review for your story I didn't want to bomb your ratings so I gave it a 4-star rating but that was an extra star each.
The story has a few grammatical errors here and there.
You could add a bit more details to the background details and I felt the story was too fast paced for me but then I could be the exception since I like reading the details etc. Not everyone will have the same problem with the pacing of your story.
Otherwise, the story is different from all those trite, clichΓ© romance novels we have here. It was certainly a breath of fresh air for a voracious reader like me πππ
@VhielF I always give a 4star rating to all the novels I am asked to review but dear yours was one of the few ones that really deserved it. Your writing is exactly up my alley and around the corner from my block ππππ
The only trouble is that your chapters fall on the shorter end of the spectrum. You should try to increase the length of each chapter to be around 1500 to 1800 to give your readers a sizeable chunk to read at a time or if you want shorter chapters then upload two of them on the same day. Sometimes if the chapters are too short, readers get a bit antsy and leave the story altogether. Atleast, I do that sometimes.
You just have a few grammatical errors at some places and once or twice I felt the sentence structure was not done to the best of your ability. For example, there was this sentence where you say that the true king felt his soul and body separated (i can't remember the exact wording), you could have written it as: He felt like/that his soul had flown away and the only thing tethering him to this world was his sheer stubbornness or something like that. You can use these words or find a better alternative, whichever suits you best.
I'll definitely keep The Summoned Kings in my library. ππππ