Thank you for your honest opinion!
It was really helpful to hear a professional opinion. I am going to try and change some things, to make the character feel more alive. To the point about plot: you’re completely right, I started and still am writing without any outline.
Yes the other one I found more interesting too. But sadly I got some back problems, and couldn’t continue writing with my pc in a sitting position. That’s the reason I started the System story on my phone, and because the reactions were much better than the other, I kept going with it.