Overlord_Venus Reading your story properly right now. That you made me “slowly” read a story on WN is saying something since I usually half skim. Maybe due to technology and gaming, I just read very fast.
I finished chapter 3, and so far I’m liking it. Will post the long chapter end comments I made since you’re a prime example of a successfully done story opener. My only (somewhat significant) qualm is punctuational errors such as lack of commas and non-optimal phrasing such as lack of parallelism. But these are quite minor. And considering you have a definable writing style and generally good vocabulary, I’d say quite minor qualms that don’t interfere with enjoyable reading.
Hm, now I have said my two cents on your writing here when I meant to save it for a review. Lol. I don’t have to review in a set way, so I believe your review will be shorter and look more like a typical reader review than the critiques I’ve been doing. Most of that and deep diving I’ve already been doing in the long comments.
In short, great job so far! This is one of the better written stories that I’ve read on WN!
I’ll read more another day and continue then.